自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details about learning to ride. Avoid repetition such as “without learning” and correct the pronunciation or word choice of “back” to “bike.” Use natural phrases such as “when I was seven,” “learned to ride,” and “felt proud of myself.” Keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. I taught myself how to ride it in the playground near our house, and I felt really proud when I finally managed to balance on it. I still remember that day clearly.

建议: Give a clear answer about whether bikes are popular now, rather than focusing mainly on childhood. Explain one or two reasons, such as convenience, low cost, or environmental benefits, and support them with a specific example. Replace unnatural phrases like “come one place to another one” with “get from one place to another,” and avoid saying that people listen to music while cycling because it may be unsafe. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in smaller cities. They are convenient and inexpensive, so people can use them to get to school or work without worrying about traffic. For example, many students ride their bikes to school because it is quicker than walking.

× Yes, I had my back when I was 7 and I learned to how to ride a bike by myself in the playground around our house.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was seven, and I learned how to ride it by myself in the playground near our house.

The phrase learned to how to ride is incorrectly structured. After learned, use how to ride or to ride, but not both together. The sentence also needs it to avoid repeating a bike. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× Proud of myself without learning without learning how to well.

✓ I was proud of myself because I learned how to ride a bike well.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a complete subject-verb structure. Use I was proud to form a complete sentence. Also, learned how to ride a bike well is the correct verb pattern. Grammar problem type ID: 23.

× Yes, because, uh, it's very convenient, uh, to come one place to another one.

✓ Yes, because it is very convenient to travel from one place to another.

The preposition from is needed before the starting place, and to is needed before the destination. The verb travel is more appropriate than come because the sentence describes movement between two places. Grammar problem type ID: 11.

× And you can also listen to music in a app in at a slow speed.

✓ You can also listen to music on an app at a slow speed.

Use an before app because app begins with a vowel sound. The preposition on is used for using an app, and at is the correct preposition before a speed. Grammar problem type ID: 22.

× And you can also listen to music in a app in at a slow speed.

✓ You can also listen to music on an app at a slow speed.

Use on an app rather than in a app, and remove the extra preposition in. We use at before expressions such as at a slow speed. Grammar problem type ID: 11.

× At least in my childhood, I think it's very popular.

✓ When I was a child, I thought bikes were very popular.

The phrase in my childhood refers to a past period, so the past-tense forms thought and were are more consistent. Bikes is plural because the statement refers to bicycles in general. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× Go to school, we think it's cool.

✓ When we went to school, we thought bikes were cool.

Go to school is not correctly connected to the main clause. Use the time conjunction when followed by a complete clause: When we went to school. The sentence also needs bikes as the subject of were cool. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× Go to school, we think it's cool.

✓ When we went to school, we thought bikes were cool.

Because the answer describes childhood, use the past-tense forms went and thought. The past form were is also needed with the plural subject bikes. Grammar problem type ID: 5.