自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar, and clearly state the main idea first. Use one or two supporting details and proper verb forms. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (for example, use "learned to ride" instead of "start psyching"). Add a linking word if you give an extra detail.

示例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about five or six. My father bought it for me and taught me how to ride, so I learned from him within a few days.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., "not very popular") and complete your sentence—don't leave it unfinished. Use vocabulary like "infrastructure" or "cycle lanes" for precision.

示例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because there are few dedicated cycle lanes and the road infrastructure is unsafe, so many people prefer cars or buses for commuting.

× I had a bike when I was shy, I think when I was five to six years old, my father brought it to me so and he taught me to use this.

✓ I had a bike when I was young; I think I was five or six years old when my father brought it to me and taught me how to use it.

The student used 'shy' instead of 'young' (word choice, but focus on tense and clarity) and produced awkward tense/phrase structures. Use simple past consistently for past events: 'I had', 'I was', 'my father brought', 'taught'. Also replace 'brought it to me so and he taught me to use this' with 'brought it to me and taught me how to use it' to correct word order and verb pattern. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple past and use 'how to' + base verb for teaching actions.

× So I learned I learned it from him and start psyching it.

✓ So I learned it from him and started riding it.

The sentence mixes past tense 'learned' with present tense 'start' and a misspelling 'psyching' (intended 'cycling' or 'riding'). Use past tense consistently: 'started'. Also use the correct gerund/participle for the verb: 'started riding' or 'started cycling'. Suggestion: after 'started' use the -ing form of the verb: 'started riding'.

× I think it's not that popular dashmark because in my country there are not bicycle lanes for people to cycle to go to school or go to workplace.

✓ I think it is not very popular because in my country there are no bicycle lanes for people to cycle to school or to the workplace.

Use present simple for general statements: 'I think it is not very popular'. Replace 'dashmark' (nonstandard) and correct 'there are not bicycle lanes' to 'there are no bicycle lanes' (correct negative quantifier). Also use correct prepositions: 'to school' and 'to the workplace'. Suggestion: use 'there are no' for plural nouns and maintain parallel structure 'to school or to the workplace'.

× So when people want to buy or want to cycle

✓ So when people want to buy a bike or want to cycle, they often do not because of the lack of lanes.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause (no completing idea). Complete the sentence to convey the result of wanting to buy or cycle. Suggestion: always ensure subordinate clauses ('when...') are followed by a main clause that completes the thought.