自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接，但第二句存在明显语法和表达问题。“I remember it to visit”应改为“I remember using it to visit”，因为需要用动名词说明“使用自行车做某事”。“which helped me learn better”与骑自行车去祖父母家之间的逻辑不清，建议改为“which gave me a sense of freedom”或说明骑车带来的具体好处。另外，可以加入自行车的颜色、父母购买的原因或骑车时的感受，使细节更加具体。

示例: Yes, I had a blue bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to my grandparents’ house every weekend. It gave me a great sense of freedom and helped me become more independent.

建议: 回答观点明确，也提到了价格低、环保和方便等原因，但存在多处搭配和语法错误。“Including my country”表达不自然，可直接说“In China”；“to work on school”应改为“to work or school”；“choice the bike”应改为“choose a bike”或“use bikes”。建议使用“First of all”和“Besides”等连接词，并具体说明共享单车或短途通勤的情况，增强答案的连贯性和细节。

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially in big cities. Many people ride them to work or school because they are affordable, convenient, and environmentally friendly. In addition, shared-bike services make cycling an easy choice for short trips.

× I remember it to visit my grandparents every weekend which helped me learn better and give me a lot of freedom.

✓ I remember riding it to visit my grandparents every weekend, which helped me learn better and give me a lot of freedom.

“remember”后面表示回忆过去做过的事情时，通常接动名词（remember doing something），所以“it to visit”应改为“riding it to visit”。

× I remember it to visit my grandparents every weekend which helped me learn better and give me a lot of freedom.

✓ I remember riding it to visit my grandparents every weekend, which helped me learn better and gave me a lot of freedom.

句子描述的是童年时期的过去经历，因此与过去式“helped”并列的动词也应使用过去式。“give”应改为“gave”。

× Including my country, lots of people ride bikes to work on school.

✓ In my country, lots of people ride bikes to work or school.

“Including my country”不能正确表达“在我的国家”。应使用介词“in”，改为“In my country”。另外，“on school”不是正确搭配；表示去学校通常使用“to school”。“work or school”也比“work on school”更自然。

× It's cheap and good for the environment and it's very convenient for people to choice the bike as a vehicle.

✓ They are cheap and good for the environment, and they are very convenient for people to choose as a means of transportation.

前文的主语是复数“bikes”，所以代词应使用复数“they”，不能使用单数“it”。同时，复数自行车应使用“They are”。

× It's cheap and good for the environment and it's very convenient for people to choice the bike as a vehicle.

✓ They are cheap and good for the environment, and they are very convenient for people to choose as a means of transportation.

“to choice”结构错误，因为“choice”是名词，不能放在“to”后面作动词。应使用动词“choose”。表达“作为交通工具”时，“as a means of transportation”比“as a vehicle”更自然。