自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear, direct, and grammatically accurate. However, it is too short to demonstrate a wider range of language. Add one specific detail, such as when you used the bicycle, where you rode it, or how you felt about it. Avoid repeating “when I was a child” if you add another sentence.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle when I was about eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

建议: You provide a comparison between the past and the present and give relevant reasons, but the answer has several grammar and organization problems. Begin with a direct answer instead of “Yet,” use “many of my friends, parents, and teachers,” and say “rely more on cars and public transportation.” Also, connect your ideas with clearer linking words and finish the incomplete sentence beginning with “Although.”

示例: Bikes used to be more popular when I was young. For example, many of my friends, parents, and teachers rode them to school or work because bicycles were affordable and practical. However, nowadays, people rely more on cars and public transportation, especially in large cities.

× Yet bicycles used to be more popular when I was young for example, many of my friends, parents and teachers used to ride them to school or work because they were affordable and very practical.

✓ However, bicycles used to be more popular when I was young. For example, many of my friends, parents, and teachers used to ride them to school or work because bicycles were affordable and very practical.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two complete thoughts without proper punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences. Using However is also clearer than Yet at the beginning of this response because it introduces a contrast with the present situation.

× Although nowadays people rely more cars and public transportation

✓ Nowadays, people rely more on cars and public transportation.

The verb rely must be followed by the preposition on. The correct structure is rely on something. For example: Many people rely on public transportation.

× Although nowadays people rely more cars and public transportation

✓ Nowadays, people rely more on cars and public transportation.

Although introduces a dependent clause, so it cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Use Although only when it is followed by a main clause, such as: Although bicycles are practical, many people now rely more on cars and public transportation.