自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接且有个人经历，但存在一些语法和搭配问题："always focus" 应改为 "always focuses"，因为主语是单数 "a high school student"；"drive a bike" 不自然，应使用 "ride a bike"。另外，问题询问的是童年经历，因此结尾可以更清楚地说明现在骑车变少的原因，并使用 "because" 或 "so" 连接信息。建议控制在2—3句，避免加入与问题关系较弱的细节。

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small bike when I was about seven, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. However, I rarely ride it nowadays because I am busy with my studies.

建议: 回答提到了过去和现在的对比，内容方向不错，但没有一开始明确回答“现在是否流行”。建议先给出清晰观点，例如“Bikes are still fairly popular, especially for short journeys”，然后再补充过去与现在的变化。语法和表达需要改进："which kind of period" 应改为 "which period"，"a few decades years ago" 应改为 "a few decades ago"，"cannot afford the car" 应改为 "could not afford cars"，"in that age" 应改为 "at that time"。此外，"take a subway" 更自然的说法是 "take the subway"，并可使用具体原因或例子增强内容。

示例: Yes, I think bikes are still fairly popular in China, especially for short trips and exercise. In the past, they were even more common because many people could not afford cars. Nowadays, however, some people prefer taking the subway or driving, particularly in large cities.

× However nowadays because I'm a high school student who always focus on the academic performance so I can hardly drive it.

✓ However, nowadays, because I'm a high school student who always focuses on academic performance, I can hardly drive it.

关系代词who指代单数名词a high school student，所以后面的动词要用第三人称单数形式：focus改为focuses。

× However nowadays because I'm a high school student who always focus on the academic performance so I can hardly drive it.

✓ However, nowadays, because I'm a high school student who always focuses on academic performance, I can hardly drive it.

because和so不能在同一个原因结果结构中同时使用。保留because后，应删除so，并在because从句后加逗号。

× However nowadays because I'm a high school student who always focus on the academic performance so I can hardly drive it.

✓ However, nowadays, because I'm a high school student who always focuses on academic performance, I can hardly drive it.

academic performance在这里表示一般性的学习表现，不是特定的某一次表现，因此通常不需要定冠词the。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

a few decades ago表示过去的时间，因此cannot要改为过去形式could not。谈论过去的能力或可能性时，也可以使用could not。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

decades本身已经是复数名词，不能再和years直接连用。应使用a few decades ago，而不是a few decades years ago。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

这里是泛指一辆汽车，第一次提到可数名词car时应使用不定冠词a，而不是定冠词the。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

前文讨论的是复数概念bikes，因此不能用单数代词it指代。使用bikes可以使指代对象更加清楚。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

表示某个过去的时间点或时期时，通常使用at that time，而不是in that age。

× It depends on which kind of period maybe a few decades years ago most Chinese people cannot afford the car so maybe in that age it was very popular.

✓ It depends on the period. Maybe a few decades ago, most Chinese people could not afford a car, so bikes were very popular at that time.

原句包含多个完整意思，但没有使用清晰的标点分隔，导致句子过长、结构不清。可以拆分成两个句子，并用so连接原因和结果。

× However, nowadays, more and more people tend to take a subway or just drive.

✓ However, nowadays, more and more people tend to take the subway or just drive.

表示乘坐公共地铁系统这一固定交通方式时，通常使用the subway，而不是a subway。