自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed. You directly answer the question and support your response with specific details, such as living in Kuala Lumpur, learning beside the pool, and nearly falling in. The linking word “but” is used effectively. However, avoid fillers such as “uh,” and make the opening more direct: “Yes, I did” or “Yes, I had one.” Also, “I have really fond memories of learning” is more natural than “I actually have really fond memories of, uh, learning.”

示例: Yes, I did. I have really fond memories of learning to ride a bike when I was a child. We lived in Kuala Lumpur, and my mom taught me beside the swimming pool. I nearly fell in once, but she caught me just in time. Riding a bike made me feel more independent and proud of myself.

建议: You give a direct opinion, but the answer contains an incomplete sentence and several fillers. “A Safeway of transportation” should be “a safe way of getting around,” and “road for bikes” is better expressed as “dedicated bike lanes” or “separate cycling paths.” Improve the structure by stating your opinion first, then giving a reason and result with a linking word such as “because” or “as a result.” Avoid repeating “umm” and make the final idea grammatically complete: “This can increase the risk of accidents.”

示例: Not really. Cycling isn’t very popular in my country because it isn’t always safe. Many cities don’t have dedicated bike lanes or separate cycling paths, so cyclists often have to share busy roads with cars. As a result, people may avoid using bikes for transportation.

× Uh, a Safeway of transportation because we don't have umm, any road for umm bikes and umm, it may cause many accidents.

✓ Uh, bikes are not a safe means of transportation because we don't have any roads for bikes, and this may cause many accidents.

The original sentence is missing a main verb after Uh. The phrase a Safeway is also incorrect in this context; it should be a safe means or a safe way. The correction uses are to form a complete sentence and changes road to roads because the speaker is referring generally to the lack of bicycle roads.