自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the word “bike.” Use the past tense consistently: “it had three wheels,” not “it has three wheels.” The phrase “that bike was the bike there” is unclear and unnecessary. Organize your response with a clear answer, followed by one or two specific details about its appearance and why you used it.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small black tricycle when I was about four years old. It had three wheels, so it was easier and safer for me to learn how to ride. Later, I learned to ride a regular bicycle.

建议: Use plural nouns and natural collocations: say “bikes are popular,” “use bikes,” and “commute by bike.” Avoid repeating “country,” “practical,” and “because.” The expression “it is all paused by the traffic situation” is incorrect; use “This is partly because of heavy traffic.” Give a direct opinion, then explain the main reason and result with linking words such as “because” and “therefore.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Many people commute by bike because the roads are often congested, and cycling is a practical and efficient way to get around. It also helps them save money on fuel and public transportation.

× it was tricycle

✓ it was a tricycle

The singular countable noun tricycle needs the indefinite article a because it refers to one tricycle that has not been previously specified.

× it has three wheels

✓ it had three wheels

The speaker is describing a bike owned in the past, so the past-tense form had is required instead of the present-tense form has.

× Specifically when I was four years old, I had my first bike and it was black also it was tricycle and so it has three wheels because I had to learn the bike first and that bike was the bike there.

✓ Specifically, when I was four years old, I had my first bike. It was black, and it was a tricycle, so it had three wheels. I had to learn to ride a bike first, and that was the bike I had.

The original contains several independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, which creates a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into shorter sentences and use commas and conjunctions to show the relationships between them.

× Actually, bike is really popular in my country because lots of people use bike to commute.

✓ Actually, bikes are really popular in my country because lots of people use bikes to commute.

The sentence refers to bikes in general, so the plural noun bikes is more appropriate. The plural subject bikes also requires the plural verb are.

× the traffic was really crowded

✓ the traffic is really heavy

The student is describing a current, general traffic situation, so the present-tense verb is should be used instead of the past-tense verb was. Heavy is also the natural adjective for describing traffic; crowded is normally used for people or places.

× because the country the traffic was really crowded so they usually like to use by to travel around

✓ because traffic in the country is really heavy, people usually prefer to use bikes to travel around

The original phrase has an incorrect word order and combines because and so in an unclear structure. Use the natural phrase traffic in the country and organize the cause and result into one clear clause.

× they usually like to use by to travel around

✓ they usually like to use bikes to travel around

The noun bike should be plural because the sentence refers to bikes in general. The word by is not the correct noun here; bikes is needed as the object of use.