自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more directly and use the correct past tense: “When I was a child, I had...” Avoid fillers and repeated phrases such as “I don’t forget.” Use a clear structure: answer the question, describe the bike, and explain why it was important to you. Also, say “a small blue bike,” not “a blue small bike.”

示例: Yes, I had a small blue bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me for my birthday, so it was very special to me. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, and I have fond memories of it.

建议: Give a confident, direct opinion instead of saying that you cannot speak for everyone. Correct the grammar and word choice: use “an open question,” “in my opinion,” “nowadays,” “people,” and “short distances.” Add a specific reason or example, such as cycling for exercise, commuting, or avoiding traffic. Avoid repeating “this day” and “nowadays.”

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Nowadays, many people ride them for short journeys because they are convenient, inexpensive, and environmentally friendly. However, cars and motorcycles are still more common for longer distances.

× When I'm child, I have a nice bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a nice bike.

The question asks about a past experience, so use the past-tense forms was and had. Also, child is a singular countable noun and needs the article a.

× When I'm child, I have a nice bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a nice bike.

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a. The correct phrase is a child.

× I don't forget it's uh, uh, blue small bike.

✓ I don't forget that it was a small blue bike.

When two adjectives describe a noun, size usually comes before color. Therefore, use small blue bike, not blue small bike.

× I don't forget it's uh, uh, blue small bike.

✓ I don't forget that it was a small blue bike.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. The correct noun phrase is a small blue bike.

× This is a very open questions because I don't uh, I don't again, I can't uh tell about all peoples.

✓ This is a very open question because I cannot speak for all people.

The article a is used with a singular noun, so questions must be changed to question. People is already the plural form of person, so peoples is incorrect in this context.

× This is a very open questions because I don't uh, I don't again, I can't uh tell about all peoples.

✓ This is a very open question because I cannot speak for all people.

Question is singular after the article a. In addition, people is the correct plural noun when referring to human beings in general.

× But in my opinions, yes, this day, nowadays we can see a lot of people riding bikes.

✓ But in my opinion, yes, nowadays we can see a lot of people riding bikes.

The fixed expression is in my opinion when giving a personal view. Opinion is normally singular in this expression.

× We can see a lot of people riding bikes in his small distance.

✓ Nowadays, we can see a lot of people riding bikes over short distances.

His is a possessive pronoun referring to a male person, but no male person is intended here. Remove the pronoun and use the general phrase over short distances.

× We can see a lot of people riding bikes in his small distance.

✓ Nowadays, we can see a lot of people riding bikes over short distances.

The preposition in is not appropriate with this meaning. Use over with distances when describing the distance people travel.