自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use the past tense consistently: say “I loved that bike” instead of “I love that bike.” Avoid repetition such as “bike” and “had that bike,” and make the memory clearer by explaining how often you used it or who gave it to you. The phrase “as I can remember” is unnatural; use “as far as I can remember.”

示例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was about six years old. As far as I can remember, I loved riding it around my neighborhood after school. I do not remember many details about it, but I still remember its bright color.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then explain the contrast logically using a linking word such as “However.” Use plural forms correctly: “cycle tracks” and “other vehicles.” Avoid the unclear and contradictory phrase “even though people mostly ride bicycles”; explain that people ride bikes despite the safety problems and lack of infrastructure.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who use them for short trips. However, there are not enough cycle tracks, so cyclists often have to share busy roads with cars and buses. As a result, many people enjoy riding bicycles but are concerned about their safety.

× Yes, I had one bike umm and I love that bike very much.

✓ Yes, I had one bike, and I loved that bike very much.

The question asks about a past experience, so the verb should remain in the past tense. Use loved instead of love because the student is describing feelings about the bike in childhood.

× These bikes are popular in my country but the thing is there are no cycle track for the bikes.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country, but the thing is that there are no cycle tracks for them.

The noun track must be plural because the sentence refers to the absence of cycle tracks in general. Use cycle tracks instead of cycle track. Also, them avoids unnecessarily repeating the phrase the bikes.