自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more naturally by saying “when I was in third grade” and “as I got older.” Use the past tense consistently: “the bike became too small,” and replace “lean it to someone else” with “lend it to someone else” or “give it to someone else.” You could also add one specific detail about how you used the bike. Use a linking word such as “so” to clearly connect the reason and result.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in third grade. I often rode it to school and around my neighborhood. However, as I got older, it became too small for me, so I lent it to my younger cousin.

建议: Begin with a complete sentence, such as “Not particularly.” Improve accuracy by saying “YouBike is a bike-sharing system” and “rent one at a station and return it at another station”; “land it” is incorrect here. Avoid repeating similar forms of public transportation unless you are making a comparison. Add a clear reason why people prefer buses or the MRT, such as convenience, weather, or longer distances.

示例: Not particularly, although YouBike is quite popular in some cities. People can rent a bike at one station and return it at another, which is convenient for short trips. However, many people still prefer buses or the MRT because they are faster and more comfortable, especially in bad weather.

× However when I was getting bigger and bigger, the bike is too small for me, so I lean it to someone else.

✓ However, when I was getting bigger and bigger, the bike was too small for me, so I lent it to someone else.

The story is about the past, so the past-tense verb was is needed instead of is. Lent is the past tense of lend. Use past-tense verbs consistently when describing completed events in the past.

× Not really we have U bike which is a bike you can land it in the bus station anywhere.

✓ Not really. We have U-bikes, which are bikes that you can rent at bus stations.

Not really and the following statement are separate sentences, so they should not be joined without punctuation. The relative clause is also clearer with the structure which are bikes that you can rent. Use a full stop to separate complete ideas and use relative clauses carefully.

× Not really we have U bike which is a bike you can land it in the bus station anywhere.

✓ Not really. We have U-bikes, which are bikes that you can rent at bus stations.

The sentence refers to U-bikes and bikes in general, so plural nouns are more appropriate. The plural subject U-bikes requires the plural verb are. Pay attention to whether you are discussing one item or items in general.

× Not really we have U bike which is a bike you can land it in the bus station anywhere.

✓ Not really. We have U-bikes, which are bikes that you can rent at bus stations.

In the original relative clause, which already functions as the object of the verb, so the additional pronoun it is unnecessary. Do not repeat an object with both a relative pronoun and another object pronoun.

× Not really we have U bike which is a bike you can land it in the bus station anywhere.

✓ Not really. We have U-bikes, which are bikes that you can rent at bus stations.

At is the appropriate preposition for locations such as bus stations. Use at when referring to a place where an activity happens or where something is available. Also, rent is the appropriate verb for getting a bike temporarily.