自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and complete your idea with a clear past-tense story. Use “rode” instead of “ride,” “went” instead of “go,” and avoid restarting sentences. Add one or two specific details, such as who gave you the bike or where you usually rode it. Keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about eight, and I often rode it to school. I really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood in the afternoon.

建议: Begin with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid making an inaccurate generalization such as “in every country,” and use natural phrases like “many people” instead of “every people.” Explain the reasons logically with linking words, and correct the grammar in “I enjoy riding my bike in the afternoon for exercise.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in cities. They are cheaper than cars and more environmentally friendly; moreover, cycling is a convenient way to exercise. I often ride my bike in the afternoon because it helps me stay fit and relax.

× It was red and I.

✓ It was red.

The phrase and I is incomplete because it does not contain a verb or express a complete idea. End the sentence after It was red, or add a complete clause, such as and I liked it.

× I ride a bike one afternoon.

✓ I rode a bike one afternoon.

The event happened in the past, so the past-tense form rode is required instead of the present-tense form ride. Use the past tense when describing completed childhood experiences.

× When I go to the school...

✓ When I went to school...

The sentence describes a past event, so go must change to its past-tense form went. In this context, school is normally used without the definite article when referring to attending school.

× I ride a bike one afternoon and when I go to the school I.

✓ I rode my bike to school one afternoon.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains an unfinished clause after I. A complete sentence needs a clear subject, verb, and complete meaning. Combining the ideas into one simple sentence makes the structure clear.

× Think bikes are popular in every country?

✓ I think bikes are popular in every country.

The sentence is missing the subject I, and it should be a statement rather than a question because the student is expressing an opinion. Include a subject before the verb to form a complete sentence.

× Every people use bikes...

✓ Everyone uses bikes...

Every cannot directly modify the plural noun people in this structure. Use the pronoun everyone, which refers to people as a group.

× Everyone use bikes...

✓ Everyone uses bikes...

Everyone is grammatically singular, so the present-tense verb must take the third-person singular ending -s: uses.

× Bikes are popular... because it's cheaper than cars.

✓ Bikes are popular... because they are cheaper than cars.

The pronoun it is singular, but bikes is plural. Use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb are to agree with bikes.

× I enjoy when I ride a bike...

✓ I enjoy riding a bike...

After enjoy, use a gerund, which is the verb plus -ing form. Therefore, enjoy riding is correct, not enjoy when I ride.

× In afternoon exercise.

✓ In the afternoon for exercise.

Use the definite article the in the fixed time expression in the afternoon. The phrase for exercise clearly expresses the purpose of riding.

× I enjoy when I ride a bike in afternoon exercise.

✓ I enjoy riding a bike in the afternoon for exercise.

For is the appropriate preposition to introduce the purpose of an activity: for exercise. The original phrase in afternoon exercise uses an incorrect preposition and does not clearly express the intended meaning.