自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid hesitation, repetition, and unfinished phrases such as “what's your my friend?” Also, use the natural expression “I was afraid of riding a bike” rather than “I was afraid to ride one,” and connect your reasons clearly with “because” or “also.”

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of riding one, and my parents couldn’t afford to buy me a bicycle. Instead, I usually played outdoor games with my friends.

建议: Give a complete answer with a clear topic sentence and explain why bikes are popular. Improve grammar by saying “one of the forms of transportation” and “save money on fuel,” not “one of the transportation” or “buying for fuels.” Avoid repeating “you can save a lot,” and finish the answer with a specific result or example. Remember to use linking words such as “because,” “in addition,” or “as a result.”

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in busy cities. Many people use them because they are an affordable form of transportation and help reduce fuel costs. In addition, cycling can help people avoid heavy traffic and stay healthy.

× As far as I I can remember, I was too afraid to ride one.

✓ As far as I can remember, I was too afraid to ride one.

The pronoun I is repeated unnecessarily. Use I only once in the phrase As far as I can remember.

× Yes, bikes are popular here in the Philippines as it is one of the transportation that we use here.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular here in the Philippines because they are one of the means of transportation that we use here.

One of the must be followed by a plural countable noun. Transportation is generally uncountable, so means of transportation is a more suitable expression. Also, bikes is plural, so it should be referred to with they, not it.

× Yes, bikes are popular here in the Philippines as it is one of the transportation that we use here.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular here in the Philippines because they are one of the means of transportation that we use here.

The subject bikes is plural, so the pronoun and verb referring to it must also be plural. Use they are instead of it is.

× You can save a lot due to the extreme inflation. You know you can save a lot instead of umm, buying for fuels.

✓ You can save a lot because of the high cost of fuel. You know, you can save a lot instead of buying fuel.

The verb buy does not take the preposition for before its object. Say buying fuel, not buying for fuels. Fuel is usually an uncountable noun when referring to fuel in general.

× You can save a lot due to the extreme inflation. You know you can save a lot instead of umm, buying for fuels.

✓ You can save a lot because of the high cost of fuel. You know, you can save a lot instead of buying fuel.

Fuel is normally used as an uncountable noun when discussing fuel in general, so the plural form fuels is inappropriate here. Use fuel.

× So that is why instead of umm what's your my friend?

✓ That is why I chose not to ride a bike and used another means of transportation instead.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains several interrupted or incorrectly combined phrases. A complete sentence needs a clear subject, verb, and logical structure. The correction expresses the likely intended idea in a complete form.

× You know you can save a lot and.

✓ You know, you can save a lot.

The sentence ends with and, but no additional clause follows it. Remove and, or complete the second part of the sentence.