自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more directly and avoid repetition: “Yes, I did” is enough instead of “Yes, I actually did have a bike.” Use the natural phrase “during the holidays” rather than “in holidays,” and replace the vague expression “and so on” with a specific activity or example. You could also add a clear detail about where you rode the bike or why you enjoyed it.

示例: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike during the holidays, especially around my neighborhood and in the nearby park. I enjoyed it because it was a fun way to exercise and spend time with my friends.

建议: Give a clearer reason for your answer and improve the grammar. Avoid the unnecessary repetition in “Most of the people...they,” the repeated phrase “as as,” and the incorrect expression “a petroleum”; say “petrol” or, more naturally, “fuel.” Also, “regular bike” is unclear because a bicycle is already a bike. Instead of saying that bicycles are popular simply because your country is developing, explain that they are affordable and economical for daily transportation.

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among students and low-income workers. They are affordable and do not require petrol, so people can use them to commute without spending much money on fuel. In addition, bicycles are useful for avoiding traffic in crowded cities.

× I used to use the bike in my free time a lot, especially in holidays and so on.

✓ I used to use the bike in my free time a lot, especially during the holidays and so on.

The preposition during is more appropriate when referring to a period such as the holidays. You can also say on holiday when referring to a holiday period in general.

× Most of the people who cannot afford a regular bike, they often use a bicycle to travel as as this cost less money than a petroleum.

✓ Most people who cannot afford a regular bike often use a bicycle to travel because it costs less than petrol.

The pronoun they is unnecessary because the subject is already Most people. Avoid repeating the subject with a pronoun in this sentence structure. Also, use because to introduce the reason more clearly.

× Most of the people who cannot afford a regular bike, they often use a bicycle to travel as as this cost less money than a petroleum.

✓ Most people who cannot afford a regular bike often use a bicycle to travel because it costs less than petrol.

The conjunction as is repeated accidentally. Use one conjunction, such as because, to connect the reason to the main clause.

× Most of the people who cannot afford a regular bike, they often use a bicycle to travel as as this cost less money than a petroleum.

✓ Most people who cannot afford a regular bike often use a bicycle to travel because it costs less than petrol.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the verb must be costs, not cost. In the present tense, most singular subjects require a verb ending in s.

× Most of the people who cannot afford a regular bike, they often use a bicycle to travel as as this cost less money than a petroleum.

✓ Most people who cannot afford a regular bike often use a bicycle to travel because it costs less than petrol.

Petrol is an uncountable noun, so it does not take the article a. Say less than petrol or less money than petrol. Most people is also more natural than Most of the people when speaking about people in general.