自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Yanıtınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve bisikletin doğum günü hediyesi olduğunu belirterek kişisel bir ayrıntı sunuyor. Ancak bazı dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı hataları var: “It was my birthday present my mom and my dad bought me” yerine “It was a birthday present that my parents bought me” denmeli. “They’re so gorgeous” ifadesi bisiklet tekil olduğu için “It was really beautiful” şeklinde kullanılmalı. Ayrıca “I think” ifadesi cümlenin sonunda gereksiz ve tekrarlar akıcılığı azaltıyor. Cevabı daha doğal hâle getirmek için renk, duygusal önem ve kullanım amacı hakkında bir veya iki net ayrıntı ekleyebilirsiniz.

示例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bike for my birthday when I was about eight years old. It was very special to me because it was my first bike, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon.

建议: Yanıtınız soruya cevap veriyor ve trafik sorununu iyi bir neden olarak kullanıyor. Ancak “in my country” ifadesi tekrarlanmış, “generally” kelimesi gereksiz şekilde yinelenmiş ve “some men are using too” yerine “some adults use them too” denmeli. “Bikes” çoğul olduğu için “use them” zamiri kullanılmalı. Ayrıca “because” ve “so that’s why” aynı cümlede birlikte kullanılmamalı; bunlardan yalnızca biri tercih edilmeli. Daha yüksek bir puan için gençlerin yanı sıra yetişkinlerin de bisiklet kullandığını ve bisikletlerin özellikle trafik veya çevre açısından neden tercih edildiğini daha akıcı biçimde açıklayın.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Many teenagers use them because heavy traffic makes driving inconvenient, and cycling is also a cheap and environmentally friendly way to travel. Although young people use bikes more often, an increasing number of adults are using them as well.

× It was my birthday present my mom and my dad bought me.

✓ It was a birthday present that my mom and dad bought me.

The sentence contains two noun phrases placed next to each other without a linking relative pronoun. Use that to connect the present with the clause describing who bought it. A clear structure is: It was a birthday present that my mom and dad bought me.

× And my bike was red and they're so gorgeous I I think.

✓ My bike was red, and it was so gorgeous, I think.

The pronoun they refers to a singular noun, my bike. Use the singular pronoun it instead. The repeated I should also be removed to make the sentence clear and grammatically complete.

× Generally, teenagers use it.

✓ Generally, teenagers use them.

The noun bikes is plural, so it cannot be used as its pronoun. Use the plural object pronoun them: Teenagers use them.

× Some. Men's are using too.

✓ Some men are using them too.

Men is already the plural form of man, so the possessive form men's is incorrect here. The apostrophe should be removed. Also, use them to refer to bikes, which is a plural noun.