自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood. State your answer directly, then add one clear detail. Avoid unclear phrases such as “this guy” and “was shared my father”; use “I had a bike” and “I shared it with my father.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old. I shared it with my father until I was about eleven, and I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

建议: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and support it with a specific reason. Use accurate vocabulary such as “popular,” “common,” “transportation,” and “get to their destinations.” Avoid repetition and unclear expressions like “fast freeze,” “best sweet break,” and “bites.”

示例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars, buses, or motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for getting to work or school. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people and fitness enthusiasts.

× Yes, of course I have by when I was five years old.

✓ Yes, of course. I had a bike when I was five years old.

The question asks about a situation in the past, so the past-tense form had is required instead of the present-tense form have. The noun bike also needs an article, so a bike is correct.

× This guy was shared my father.

✓ I shared it with my father.

The preposition with is used after share when identifying the person who participated in sharing. The original sentence incorrectly places my father directly after shared.

× This guy was shared my father.

✓ I shared it with my father.

A bike is an object, so it is the appropriate pronoun. The expression this guy refers to a person and is not suitable for a bike.

× This guy was shared my father when I-11.

✓ I shared it with my father when I was 11.

Because the event happened when the student was 11, the past-tense forms shared and was are needed. The phrase I-11 must be expressed as I was 11.

× I think it's not I everyone in my country want to go with fast freeze to get their place with best sweet break you can.

✓ I do not think everyone in my country wants to travel by fast transportation to get to their destinations.

The original sentence uses the incorrect pronoun structure it's not I everyone. The natural structure is I do not think everyone. Also, everyone is grammatically singular, so the verb must be wants.

× Everyone in my country want to go with fast freeze.

✓ Everyone in my country wants to travel by fast transportation.

Everyone is treated as a singular subject, so the verb must end in -s: wants, not want.

× To get their place.

✓ To get to their destinations.

The preposition to is required after get when referring to reaching a place. The phrase get their place is not grammatically correct in this context.

× So I think the the bites are not prevalent in my country.

✓ So, I think bikes are not prevalent in my country.

The definite article the is not normally used before a plural noun when making a general statement. The repeated article must also be removed. Bikes is the correct plural form of bike.