自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use the past tense consistently. “When I was a drive” should be “when I was a child,” “three well bike” should be “three-wheeled bike,” and “it has pink” should be “it was pink.” Also, use correct articles and pronouns: “a gift from my mother” and “this bike.” Link your ideas with “because” and keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a three-wheeled bike when I was a child. It was pink and had cartoon pictures on it. I really loved it because it was a birthday gift from my mother.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and organize the reasons with linking words such as “firstly” and “also.” Replace unclear phrases with accurate expressions: “for narrow streets,” “for short trips,” and “they cost less than cars and are more environmentally friendly.” Avoid repeating “convenient,” and support your opinion with a specific example, such as students using bikes to travel around cities.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and inexpensive. They are especially useful on narrow streets and for short trips. In addition, many people choose them because they cost less than cars and are more environmentally friendly.

× Of course when I was a drive I had a three well bike it has pink with the picture cartoons I really enjoy this bikes because they are gift for my mother on my birthday

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I had a three-wheeled bike. It was pink and had cartoon pictures on it. I really enjoyed this bike because it was a gift from my mother for my birthday.

The original answer contains several clauses joined together without proper punctuation or clear sentence boundaries. Divide the ideas into separate sentences, and use a clear noun phrase such as when I was a child.

× I had a three well bike

✓ I had a three-wheeled bike.

The phrase three-wheeled describes one bike with three wheels. The noun bike remains singular because it follows the article a. Use three-wheeled as a compound adjective before bike.

× It has pink with the picture cartoons

✓ It was pink and had cartoon pictures on it.

The answer describes a bike that the student had in the past, so the past-tense forms was and had are needed instead of the present-tense form has. Use and to connect the two descriptions.

× It was pink and had cartoon pictures on it.

✓ It was pink and had cartoon pictures on it.

The original description needs a conjunction to connect the bike's color and its pictures. And correctly joins these two related descriptions.

× I really enjoy this bikes

✓ I really enjoyed this bike.

This refers to one bike, so the singular noun bike is required. Because the student is talking about a childhood possession, enjoyed should also be in the past tense.

× I really enjoy this bike

✓ I really enjoyed this bike.

The question asks about the student's childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the past-tense verb enjoyed rather than the present-tense verb enjoy.

× They are gift for my mother

✓ It was a gift from my mother.

The subject is one bike, so use the singular pronoun it and the singular verb was. The singular countable noun gift also needs the article a.

× It was a gift for my mother on my birthday

✓ It was a gift from my mother for my birthday.

Use from to show who gave the gift and for to show the occasion or purpose. The phrase from my mother for my birthday is the natural prepositional structure here.

× They are convenient and easy to use

✓ They are convenient and easy to use.

No correction is needed here because bikes is plural and they correctly refers to more than one bike. The plural subject agrees with are.

× They are convenient or narrow twists and for short chips

✓ They are convenient on narrow streets and for short trips.

The preposition on is used with streets to describe where bikes are convenient. The phrase for short trips correctly describes the purpose or distance of the journeys.

× They are convenient or narrow twists and for short chips

✓ They are convenient on narrow streets and for short trips.

Or shows a choice, but the student is listing two advantages. Use and to connect the advantages. Also, streets and trips are the appropriate nouns in this context.

× They cost less torn

✓ They cost less than cars.

When comparing two things, use less than, not less torn. A clear comparison object, such as cars, must follow than.

× They cost less than cars

✓ They cost less than cars.

The comparison is grammatically complete when the cost of bikes is compared with the cost of cars. After less than, include the object being compared with bikes.

× They are more equal

✓ They are more eco-friendly.

The plural subject they correctly takes are. The original final adjective appears to be a misheard expression; eco-friendly is the appropriate adjective for describing bikes as environmentally better than cars.