自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition or self-correction. Say “a pink bicycle” instead of “a pink bike bicycle,” and use “three wheels” rather than “three tires” if you mean a tricycle. The phrase “two extra small tires in the back” should be changed to “two small training wheels at the back.” Also, clearly explain whether you learned to ride it; for example, say “I hadn't learned to ride a two-wheeled bike yet.”

示例: Yes, I had a pink tricycle when I was a child. It had three wheels and two small training wheels at the back, so it was quite stable. However, I hadn’t learned to ride a two-wheeled bike yet.

建议: Give a clear answer first, then support it with reasons and specific details. Use “they are easy to use” instead of “it’s so easier to use,” and say “cycling provides good exercise” for more natural vocabulary. Remember that “people” takes the plural verb “seem,” and avoid repeating “ride it.” Add a linking word such as “Moreover” or “As a result” to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They are convenient and relatively inexpensive, and cycling also provides good exercise. Moreover, people of all ages, from teenagers to older adults, often ride bikes for commuting or leisure.

× It used to have a two extra small tires in the back.

✓ It used to have two extra small tires in the back.

The quantifier two already specifies the number of tires, so it cannot be preceded by the article a. Use two extra small tires.

× I I I didn't learn to ride it ride it or not 2 cycles yet.

✓ I hadn't learned to ride a bicycle yet.

Because this sentence refers to a situation that had not happened by a specific time in the past, the past perfect form hadn't learned is more appropriate. The repeated words and unclear phrase or not 2 cycles are disfluencies and should be removed for clarity.

× Oh yeah, of course most people use bikes it's so easier to use and it gives much more exercise

✓ Oh, yeah, of course. Most people use bikes because they are easier to use and provide more exercise.

The original contains a run-on sentence because several independent ideas are joined without proper punctuation or a suitable conjunction. Divide the ideas or connect them with because. Also, use the plural pronoun they to refer to bikes.

× it's so easier to use

✓ They are easier to use.

Easier is already a comparative adjective, so it should not be used with so in this structure. Because bikes is plural, use they are easier to use.

× Young people, adults and even old people seems to ride it ride it daily.

✓ Young people, adults, and even older people seem to ride bikes daily.

The subject contains several plural groups joined by and, so the plural verb seem is required, not the singular verb seems.

× Young people, adults and even old people seems to ride it ride it daily.

✓ Young people, adults, and even older people seem to ride bikes daily.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use them, or repeat the noun bikes. Removing the repeated words also makes the sentence clearer.