自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 첫 문장에서 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 “my parents was”는 주어와 동사의 수가 일치하지 않으므로 “my parents were”로 고쳐야 하며, “my parents thought didn't allow me”는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. “My parents didn’t allow me to have one” 또는 “My parents thought I was too young to ride one”처럼 표현하세요. 또한 “It’s because”를 반복하기보다 “The main reason was that…”을 사용하면 더 자연스럽고, 자전거를 갖지 못한 구체적인 이유를 한 문장 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. The main reason was that my parents thought I was too young to ride one safely. Instead, I usually played with my friends in the park.

建议: “I can definitely say”로 의견을 분명히 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 그러나 “people can riding”은 “people can ride”로 고쳐야 하며, “or something else”는 의미가 모호하므로 구체적인 활동으로 바꾸세요. 공원뿐 아니라 출퇴근이나 운동에도 자전거를 이용한다는 내용을 연결어와 함께 추가하면 내용과 어휘가 더 효과적입니다. 예를 들어 “In addition”이나 “As a result”를 사용해 자전거의 인기와 그 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in South Korea. There are many parks and riverside paths where people can ride for exercise or relaxation. In addition, some people use bicycles to commute, especially during the warmer months.

× It's because my parents was umm, my parents thought didn't allow me to have a bicycle.

✓ It's because my parents were—umm, my parents thought they shouldn't allow me to have a bicycle.

The subject parents is plural, so the past form of be must be were, not was. Also, the verb thought needs a subject in the clause that follows it: they shouldn't allow me. Grammar problem type ID: 27.

× It's because my parents was umm, my parents thought didn't allow me to have a bicycle.

✓ It's because my parents were—umm, my parents thought they shouldn't allow me to have a bicycle.

The clause my parents thought didn't allow me is incomplete because didn't allow lacks a subject. Use they as the subject of the second clause: my parents thought they shouldn't allow me. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× There are lots of parks in South Korea, so people can riding around the lake or something else.

✓ There are lots of parks in South Korea, so people can ride around the lake or somewhere else.

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Therefore, can riding must be changed to can ride. Grammar problem type ID: 4.

× There are lots of parks in South Korea, so people can riding around the lake or something else.

✓ There are lots of parks in South Korea, so people can ride around the lake or somewhere else.

The -ing form cannot directly follow can. Use the base verb ride after a modal verb. Grammar problem type ID: 8.