自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid hesitation and repetition. Use “bike,” not “bark,” and say “bought a bike for my brother” rather than “bought for my brother.” Your answer would be more natural if you explained how you shared the bicycle and gave a specific detail, such as where you rode it. Also, replace “a perfect thing to have a bike to ride” with a clearer expression such as “Having a bike was great because I could ride around my neighborhood.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for my brother, but we shared it and took turns riding it around our neighborhood. It was a lot of fun and gave us a convenient way to play outside.

建议: State your main idea more naturally by saying “Bikes are not very popular compared with those in some other countries.” Avoid unnecessary hesitations and use “the government” or “local governments” consistently. Improve the phrase “encourage the people” to “encourage people,” and say “for example” before giving an example. Add a specific reason why cycling is not popular, such as unsafe roads or a lack of bike lanes, and express the date as “on the third of June.”

示例: Bikes are not very popular in my country compared with some other countries. Many people prefer cars or public transport because some roads are unsafe for cyclists and there are not enough bike lanes. However, the government is trying to encourage cycling by promoting events such as National Bicycle Day, which is held on the third of June.

× If I compare with other countries, it's not popular.

✓ If I compare my country with other countries, bicycles are not as popular here.

The verb compare normally needs a clear object. You compare one country with other countries, not compare with other countries by itself. The revised sentence also makes the comparison object, bicycles, clear.

× If I compare with other countries, it's not popular.

✓ If I compare my country with other countries, they are not as popular here.

Bicycles is plural, so the pronoun referring to bicycles should be they, not it. Alternatively, you can avoid the pronoun and say bicycles are not as popular here.

× My father, uh, bought for my brother and we kind of used it together and shared one bicycle.

✓ My father bought a bicycle for my brother, and we used it together and shared it.

The verb bought needs a direct object. Add a bicycle after bought. Because the sentence already identifies the bicycle, use it when referring to the same bicycle later.

× Our governments are trying to implement new strategies to encourage the people to use bicycles more, such as, uh, we have, uh, National Bicycle Day.

✓ Our government is trying to implement new strategies to encourage people to use bicycles more, such as having a National Bicycle Day.

Such as should be followed by a noun, noun phrase, or gerund phrase, not a complete clause beginning with we have. Having a National Bicycle Day provides the correct structure.

× It's in there, if I'm not mistaken, 3rd of June.

✓ It is, if I'm not mistaken, on the 3rd of June.

Use the preposition on with a specific date. The phrase in there is not appropriate for referring to the date of an event.

× It's in there, if I'm not mistaken, 3rd of June.

✓ It is, if I'm not mistaken, on the 3rd of June.

Ordinal dates generally require the definite article the: the 3rd of June. Remember to use the before ordinal numbers when referring to a specific date.