自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and avoid repetition and fillers such as “when, when” and “uh.” Use the past tense consistently: “when I was,” “I got older,” and “I got a new motorcycle.” Also, say “it no longer fit me” instead of “it didn't fit me along.” You could add one specific detail about how you used the bike to make the answer more engaging, while keeping it within three or four sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was in fourth grade. I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood. When I grew older, I got a motorcycle at about sixteen because my bicycle was too small for me.

建议: Use the plural subject “bikes” with “they are,” rather than “it is.” Replace unnatural phrases such as “students from home” and “by bicycle only” with “students ride bicycles from home” and “often travel by bicycle.” Avoid repetition in “Co coaching centre,” and connect your reasons more naturally with a linking phrase such as “In addition.” Include a specific example of where people ride bicycles or explain how government support encourages cycling.

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among school students. Many children ride them from home to school or to coaching centres because cycling is affordable and convenient. In addition, the government promotes sustainable transport by building cycle lanes and organizing awareness campaigns.

× But uh, when I get older day by day, at the age of almost 16 to 17, I get a new motorcycle because that one didn't fit me along.

✓ But as I got older, at around the age of 16 or 17, I got a new motorcycle because the old one no longer fit me.

The answer describes events that happened in the past, so the past tense is required: got older and got a new motorcycle. The phrase didn't fit me along is incorrect; use no longer fit me or did not fit me anymore.

× But uh, when I get older day by day, at the age of almost 16 to 17, I get a new motorcycle because that one didn't fit me along.

✓ But as I got older, at around the age of 16 or 17, I got a new motorcycle because the old one no longer fit me.

Along is not the correct adverb in this context. To express that the bike stopped being suitable, use no longer or anymore. Also, around the age of 16 or 17 is more natural than at the age of almost 16 to 17.

× Yes, it is very much popular in my country because students from home go to school or go to the coaching centre by bicycle only and government also promotes sustainable transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because students go to school or to coaching centres by bicycle, and the government also promotes sustainable transportation.

The noun bikes is plural, so it should not be replaced by the singular pronoun it. Repeating the plural subject, bikes, makes the subject and pronoun agree correctly.

× Yes, it is very much popular in my country because students from home go to school or go to the coaching centre by bicycle only and government also promotes sustainable transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because students go to school or to coaching centres by bicycle, and the government also promotes sustainable transportation.

Very much popular is unnatural because popular is normally modified by very, not very much. Say very popular. The expression by bicycle is already clear, so only is unnecessary here.

× Yes, it is very much popular in my country because students from home go to school or go to the coaching centre by bicycle only and government also promotes sustainable transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because students go to school or to coaching centres by bicycle, and the government also promotes sustainable transportation.

Use the definite article the before government when referring to the government of a particular country. Also, coaching centres is used in the plural because the statement refers generally to students and their destinations.