自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then give one clear personal detail. Avoid unclear phrases such as “it was somewhere at that time” and the incomplete expression “when I was in first.” You could say that you shared the bike because there was only one bike available, and use a linking word such as “because” or “so” to explain the situation. Keep the answer to two or three well-organized sentences.

示例: Yes, I did. My grandmother gave me my first bike when I was about six, and I shared it with my cousin because there was only one bike at my grandparents’ house. We often rode it together when we visited them.

建议: Your answer gives a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but it is one long sentence with repeated uses of “I think” and “so.” Use a more natural phrase such as “because scooters are so common” instead of “due to the prevalence of a scooter culture,” and say “fewer people” rather than “less people.” Add a linking word such as “as a result” and use “bike-friendly” with a hyphen.

示例: No, I don’t think bikes are particularly popular in my country. Scooters are much more common, and many roads are not very bike-friendly, so fewer people choose to cycle for transportation. As a result, most people use bikes mainly for exercise or leisure.

× So we were hanging out at my grandparents.

✓ So we were hanging out at my grandparents' house.

When referring to someone's home, use a possessive form followed by house. The phrase at my grandparents is incomplete or unnatural in this context. You can also say at my grandparents' place.

× I had a few bikes when I was in first.

✓ I had a few bikes when I was in first grade.

The phrase in first is incomplete because first must describe a school grade. Add grade to complete the expression: in first grade.

× Less people would want to own a bike.

✓ Fewer people would want to own a bike.

Use fewer with countable plural nouns such as people, bikes, and cars. Use less with uncountable nouns such as time, money, or traffic.

× Mostly people use bikes to exercise only.

✓ Most people use bikes only for exercise.

Most is the correct determiner before the noun people. Mostly is an adverb and cannot normally be used directly before people in this meaning.

× Most people use bikes to exercise only.

✓ Most people use bikes only for exercise.

Only should be placed immediately before the phrase it modifies. Here, only modifies the purpose of using bikes, so place it before for exercise: use bikes only for exercise.