自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more directly and use consistent past tense. Say “When I was a child, I didn’t have a bike,” rather than “I have no bike.” Also, change “I have ride” to “I rode.” You could add one specific detail explaining where or how you rode a bicycle. Use a linking word such as “however” to contrast the two ideas.

示例: When I was a child, I didn’t have a bike of my own. However, I sometimes rode my friends’ bicycles around my neighborhood. I really enjoyed it because it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid hesitations and repetition, such as “mountain” and “uh.” Correct the grammar in “someone like” and “all various of Indian cities.” Explain specifically why bicycles are popular and give one or two clear examples, such as commuting, exercise, or tourism. Use linking words like “for example” and “in addition” to organize your ideas, and keep the answer concise.

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in India, especially among young people and tourists. Many people use them for exercise, while others ride them to explore cities and rural areas. For example, cycling tours and mountain biking are becoming increasingly popular in places such as Manali and Goa.

× When I was child I have no bike, but I have ride a bicycle when I was young.

✓ When I was a child, I had no bike, but I rode a bicycle when I was young.

The singular countable noun child needs the article a. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to one person or thing in general. The phrase should be a child.

× When I was child I have no bike, but I have ride a bicycle when I was young.

✓ When I was a child, I had no bike, but I rode a bicycle when I was young.

The question asks about a period in the past, so use the simple past tense. Have no should become had no, and have ride should become rode.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very popular in my country because someone like to ride in or uh, in all various of Indian cities, like a mountain, mountain riding as well, uh, different types of location to touring India.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because someone likes to ride in various Indian cities.

Someone is a singular third-person subject, so the verb needs the -s ending: someone likes. However, people is more natural if you mean several bike riders: people like to ride.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very popular in my country because someone like to ride in or uh, in all various of Indian cities, like a mountain, mountain riding as well, uh, different types of location to touring India.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because people like to ride in various Indian cities.

All various is not used together in this context. Use various Indian cities or all kinds of cities. Various already means several different cities.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very popular in my country because someone like to ride in or uh, in all various of Indian cities, like a mountain, mountain riding as well, uh, different types of location to touring India.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because people enjoy different types of locations for touring India.

When referring to more than one place, use the plural form locations. The singular form location does not agree with the meaning of different types of.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very popular in my country because someone like to ride in or uh, in all various of Indian cities, like a mountain, mountain riding as well, uh, different types of location to touring India.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because people enjoy mountain riding and touring India.

The phrase to touring is grammatically incorrect. After to, use the base form tour, as in to tour India. Alternatively, use the preposition for before an -ing form: for touring India. Here, touring is also naturally coordinated with mountain riding after enjoy.