自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and naturally, but avoid unnecessary repetition such as “did have” and “the bike.” Use “I had a bike” and “I rode it every day.” You could also add one specific detail, such as where you rode it or why you enjoyed cycling. Keep the answer to two or three connected sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every day. I usually cycled around my neighborhood because it was a fun and convenient way to spend time outdoors.

建议: Give a clear opinion first and then support it with relevant reasons. Avoid the grammatical error in “my husband he owns”; say “my husband owns.” Also, “in that one” is unnatural, and the claim that bicycles are more common than in any other country is too broad and unsupported. Use more precise language, such as “quite popular” or “especially in cities,” and include a specific reason or example.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who commute to work. My husband owns a bicycle shop, so I have seen how many customers buy bikes for exercise and daily transportation. However, their popularity varies from city to city.

× Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit in that one.

✓ Indeed, yes, even though my husband owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit in that one.

The noun phrase my husband already functions as the subject, so the additional subject pronoun he is unnecessary. Use either my husband owns or he owns, but not both together.

× Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit in that one.

✓ Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit from that one.

The natural preposition used with make a profit is from when referring to the source of the profit. Therefore, use make a profit from the business, not make a profit in the business.

× Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit in that one.

✓ Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit from it.

Use the pronoun it to refer to the bicycle business. That one is generally used to distinguish one object from another and sounds unnatural in this context.

× Indeed, yes, even though my husband he owns a bicycle business and he makes a lot of profit in that one. So definitely in my home country, bicycles are more common than in any other country.

✓ Indeed, yes. Although my husband owns a bicycle business and makes a lot of profit from it, bicycles are definitely more common in my home country than in any other country.

Even though introduces a dependent clause, so it should be connected smoothly to a complete main clause. The original structure places a dependent clause awkwardly before a separate sentence beginning with So. Combining the ideas into one sentence with Although creates a clearer and more grammatical structure.