自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답하는 주제문이 부족하고, ‘run bicycle’은 ‘ride a bicycle’, ‘When I was child’는 ‘When I was a child’로 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 ‘embarrassed to about teaching’은 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘I felt embarrassed because I couldn’t ride it at first’처럼 표현하세요. ‘after few days ago’는 ‘after a few days’가 자연스럽습니다. 아버지가 가르쳐 준 과정과 그 결과를 ‘At first’, ‘but’, ‘eventually’ 같은 연결어로 정리하면 더 논리적이고 자연스러운 답변이 됩니다.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, but I felt embarrassed because I kept falling off at first. After a few days of practice, I became much more confident. I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

建议: ‘bicycle is not one of the most factor’는 ‘Bicycles are not one of the most popular means of transportation’ 또는 ‘Bikes are not very popular’로 고쳐야 합니다. ‘the many people’ 대신 ‘many people’을 사용하고, 버스와 지하철을 이용하는 이유를 한 가지 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 답변이 ‘So’에서 끝나므로 결론을 완성하고, ‘because’나 ‘while’ 같은 연결어로 자전거와 대중교통을 비교하면 좋습니다. 또한 불필요한 망설임(‘MMM’, ‘umm’)을 줄이고 3~4문장으로 명확하게 말하세요.

示例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people usually take buses or the subway because public transportation is convenient and affordable. In addition, some cities have heavy traffic and limited bike lanes, which can make cycling unsafe. However, bikes are becoming more popular for exercise and short trips.

× When I was child, my father taught me how to run bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, my father taught me how to ride a bicycle.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. Bicycle also needs an article because it is a singular countable noun. The natural verb used with bicycle is ride, not run.

× The first time I was embarrassed to about teaching, but after few days ago I was totally confident about riding bicycle.

✓ The first time, I was embarrassed about learning, but after a few days, I was totally confident about riding a bicycle.

Embarrassed is followed by the preposition about, not to about. The phrase after a few days already indicates a past time period, so ago should not be used after it. Bicycle also needs the article a.

× The first time I was embarrassed to about teaching, but after few days ago I was totally confident about riding bicycle.

✓ The first time, I was embarrassed about learning, but after a few days, I was totally confident about riding a bicycle.

The plural noun days requires the quantifier phrase a few, not few, when the meaning is several days. Also, after a few days is correct here; after a few days ago is not grammatically appropriate.

× I think bicycle is not one of the most factor in my country.

✓ I think bicycles are not among the most important forms of transportation in my country.

Bicycle is used generically here, so the plural form bicycles is more appropriate. In the structure one of the most, the noun after most must be plural. The revised phrase among the most important forms of transportation is also more natural and grammatically complete.

× I think bicycle is not one of the most factor in my country.

✓ I think bicycles are not among the most important forms of transportation in my country.

The plural subject bicycles requires the plural verb are, not is. Subject and verb must agree in number.

× The many people usually ride bus or subway instead of bicycle.

✓ Many people usually ride buses or the subway instead of bicycles.

The article the is unnecessary before the general expression many people. Bus and bicycle are being used generally, so their plural forms are more natural. Subway commonly takes the definite article the when referring to the public transportation system.