自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接表达了“有”，但出现了明显的自我纠正和重复，如“我有”改成“我有过”，以及“back”应为“bike”。“a birthday gift that brought from my dad”语法不完整，应使用被动结构“a birthday gift that was bought by my dad”，或更自然地说“a birthday gift from my dad”。建议按照“直接回答＋具体细节＋使用感受”的结构组织答案，并减少停顿词和重复。

示例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was five as a birthday gift from my dad. I was really excited, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

建议: 回答基本回应了问题，也提供了汽车和地铁这两个原因，但“bags”应为“bikes”，“I think it”是不自然的表达，“use by bike”应改为“ride bikes”或“travel by bike”。建议先明确表态，再用连接词“because”解释原因，并补充一个更具体的结果或例子。注意避免重复“I think”。

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country nowadays. This is mainly because many people drive cars or take the subway to work. As a result, they rarely ride bikes, especially in large cities where the roads are often busy.

× Actually I have my, I had my back when I was 5.

✓ Actually, I had a bike when I was five.

“When I was five”表示过去的时间，所以应该使用一般过去时“had”，不能使用现在时“have”。另外，“a bike”是正确的名词表达；“my back”不符合句意。

× That's a birthday gift that brought, uh, brought from my dad.

✓ It was a birthday gift brought by my dad.

这里想表达“这辆自行车是爸爸送的”，主语是礼物或自行车，应该使用被动语态“was brought”。“by my dad”表示动作的执行者。也可以说“It was a birthday gift from my dad.”

× No, I think it.

✓ No, I don't think so.

“I think it”在这里句子结构不完整，不能清楚表达“我不这么认为”。回答一般疑问句时，可以使用完整表达“No, I don't think so.”

× They seldom use by bike.

✓ They seldom travel to work by bike.

“by bike”表示交通方式，前面通常搭配“travel”或“go”，不能说“use by bike”。“travel to work by bike”表示“骑自行车去上班”。