自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本切题，也提到了自行车的来源、颜色和骑车能力，但存在明显的时态、搭配和表达错误。“I have a bike”应改为过去时“I had a bike”；“a gift that sent by my mother”应改为“a gift that was given/sent to me by my mother”；“love it really much”应改为“really loved it”；“until I was 8 years old, I can ride”应改为“by the age of eight, I could ride”。“Which car is pink?”与上下文不连贯，可能是口误或识别错误，应直接说明自行车的颜色。建议使用“是的+具体描述+补充经历”的结构，并控制在3—4句内。

示例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my mother, so it was very special to me. Although I was not very good at riding, I learned to ride it by myself by the age of eight.

建议: 回答观点明确，但部分内容难以理解，且有较多词汇、语法和搭配问题。“bite”应为“bikes”，“con”应为“country”；“bikes are essential for our country”表达过于绝对，建议改为“bikes are quite popular”；“pay one or CN¥2”应明确为“pay one or two yuan”；“you can write it”应为“you can ride one”；“ride a bike is best choice”应改为“riding a bike is the best choice”。建议先直接回答受欢迎程度，再用共享单车价格和年轻人买不起汽车作为具体原因，并使用“because/also/for example”等连接词使逻辑更清楚。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people use shared bikes because they are cheap and convenient; for example, a short ride may cost only one or two yuan. In addition, some young people choose bikes because they cannot afford to buy a car.

× Obviously, yes, I have a bike.

✓ Obviously, yes, I had a bike.

问题是在回答关于童年经历的问题时使用了现在时 have。因为问题询问的是过去，所以应使用过去时 had。建议先判断问题的时间，再选择相应的时态。

× This bike was a gift that sent by my mother.

✓ This bike was a gift that was sent by my mother.

关系从句中的 gift 是“被妈妈送出的”，所以需要使用被动语态 was sent。过去分词 sent 不能单独作谓语，前面必须有 be 动词 was。

× I love it really much.

✓ I loved it very much.

much 通常不能用 really 修饰来表达“非常喜欢”。表达“非常”时，应使用 very much。由于语境是在谈论童年经历，love 也应改为过去式 loved。

× Until I was 8 years old, I can ride a bike by myself.

✓ Until I was 8 years old, I could ride a bike by myself.

句子描述的是过去的能力，因此情态动词 can 应改为过去式 could。描述过去能够做某事时，应使用 could。

× People only need to pay one or CN¥2 that you can write it for almost 20 minutes and ask.

✓ People only need to pay one or two yuan to ride a bike for almost 20 minutes.

原句中 that 引导的结构与主句连接错误，而且 you 与 people 的主语不一致。表达“花钱骑车”时，可以使用 pay...to do...结构，例如 pay one or two yuan to ride a bike。

× For some young people, they don't have enough money to buy a car.

✓ Some young people don't have enough money to buy a car.

For some young people 已经引出了谈论对象，后面再使用 they 会造成句子结构重复。可以直接让 Some young people 作主语，使句子更加完整、自然。

× Maybe ride a bike is best choice for them.

✓ Maybe riding a bike is the best choice for them.

动词短语作主语时，通常要使用动名词形式 riding，而不能直接使用动词原形 ride。另外，best 是最高级，前面通常需要加定冠词 the。

× Maybe riding a bike is best choice for them.

✓ Maybe riding a bike is the best choice for them.

best 是最高级，表示“最好的选择”时，前面通常要加定冠词 the，因此应说 the best choice。