自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, but avoid repeating the same idea in the final sentence. Use natural expressions such as “I didn’t have a bike” and “when I was a child,” rather than “any bike” and “when I was charged.” Be careful with grammar: say “they didn’t allow me,” not “they didn’t allowed me,” and say “I might have an accident,” not “I may have some accidents and risked my life.” You could add one specific result, such as how you travelled or what you did instead of cycling.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were worried that I might have an accident, so they didn’t allow me to ride one. Instead, I usually walked to school or was driven there by my parents.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then give two logically connected reasons. Use correct subject–verb agreement: “bikes save” and “they show,” not “it saves” and “it shows.” Replace unclear phrases such as “my generation” and “shows the passion of this modern generation” with specific ideas, such as saving money, avoiding traffic, or being environmentally friendly. The response is incomplete, so finish the sentence and avoid vague wording like “helps us.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are affordable and help people save money on transportation. In addition, bikes are convenient for short journeys because they can avoid traffic and are better for the environment.

× No, I didn't have any bike when I was charged because my parents were too scared, uh, that I may have some accidents and risked my life.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was charged because my parents were too scared that I might have some accidents and risk my life.

A singular countable noun such as bike normally requires an article, so a bike is more appropriate than any bike in this affirmative description. After the modal verb might, use the base form risk, not the past-tense form risked.

× No, I didn't have any bike when I was charged because my parents were too scared, uh, that I may have some accidents and risked my life.

✓ No, I didn't have any bike when I was charged because my parents were too scared that I may have some accidents and risk my life.

A modal verb such as may must be followed by the base form of a verb. Therefore, use risk rather than risked. In this context, might may also be used to express a past possibility.

× So they didn't allowed me to buy any kind of bike when I was a child or they didn't pursue me any.

✓ So they didn't allow me to buy any kind of bike when I was a child or they didn't pursue me any.

After the auxiliary did or didn't, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, use allow, not allowed. The phrase didn't pursue me any is unclear, but changing its meaning would go beyond the specified grammar categories.

× Of course I do because the bikes are very useful to my generation, it saves the transportation cost and we can go wherever we want.

✓ Of course I do because bikes are very useful to my generation, they save transportation costs, and we can go wherever we want.

When talking about bikes in general, do not use the definite article the before the plural noun bikes. Also, transportation costs is the natural plural form when referring to general expenses.

× Of course I do because the bikes are very useful to my generation, it saves the transportation cost and we can go wherever we want.

✓ Of course I do because bikes are very useful to my generation, they save transportation costs, and we can go wherever we want.

The subject bikes is plural, so it should be referred to with the plural pronoun they and followed by the plural verb save. The singular pronoun it and singular verb saves do not agree with bikes.

× Of course I do because the bikes are very useful to my generation, it saves the transportation cost and we can go wherever we want.

✓ Of course I do because bikes are very useful to my generation. They save transportation costs, and we can go wherever we want.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Separate the clauses with a full stop or connect them with an appropriate conjunction.

× And also bikes are the most popular in our country because it shows the passion of this modern generation and helps us

✓ Also, bikes are very popular in our country because they show the passion of this modern generation and help us.

The plural noun bikes must be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. The verbs also need to agree with they, so use show and help.

× And also bikes are the most popular in our country because it shows the passion of this modern generation and helps us

✓ Also, bikes are very popular in our country because they show the passion of this modern generation and help us.

Because bikes is plural, the related verbs must also be plural: show and help. The singular forms shows and helps would be correct only with a singular subject.