自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct answer first, then add one or two clear details. Avoid repeating phrases such as “I started learning how to bike, how to ride a bike” and “I I.” Use the correct expression “ride a bike,” not “bike,” and complete your description of the bicycle. You could also mention where you rode it or how you felt about it. Try to avoid stopping with an incomplete phrase such as “It was pink with…”

示例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about ten, and my dad bought me a pink one for my birthday. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, and I really enjoyed it.

建议: State your main idea clearly and avoid repeating “mostly” and using fillers such as “umm.” Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “Most people have their own vehicles” and “motorbikes or cars.” Use a linking word such as “because” to explain why bikes are less popular, and give a specific comparison between bicycles and other forms of transport. Be careful to distinguish between “bikes” meaning bicycles and “motorbikes.”

示例: Bicycles are not especially popular in my country, although many young people use them for exercise and short trips. Most adults prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for commuting to work or school. In addition, the heavy traffic and hot weather can make cycling less appealing.

× Yes, I I started learning how to bike, how to ride a bike when I was about 10 and after I I could I was good at it.

✓ Yes, I started learning how to ride a bike when I was about 10. After that, I became good at it.

The original sentence contains repeated subjects and an incomplete, confused verb structure. Use one clear subject and separate the ideas into two sentences. The phrase how to ride a bike is also sufficient; how to bike is unnecessary here.

× Umm bite bites are not that popular in my country.

✓ Um, bikes are not that popular in my country.

The noun bike must be plural because the sentence refers to bikes in general. Use bikes, not the repeated forms bite and bites.

× Mostly people have their own be vehicle.

✓ Most people have their own vehicles.

Use most, not mostly, before a noun phrase to describe the majority of people. Mostly is an adverb and usually modifies a verb, adjective, or another adverb. The phrase also needs the plural noun vehicles because it refers to people's vehicles in general.

× They are umm motorbike or cars.

✓ They are usually motorbikes or cars.

The noun motorbike must be plural to match cars and to refer to vehicles in general. The unnecessary hesitation and repetition have also been removed.

× Motorbikes or cars, which is more convenient for them to commute to work or to school.

✓ Motorbikes or cars, which are more convenient for commuting to work or school.

The subject motorbikes or cars is plural, so use are rather than is. The plural adjective convenient agrees with the plural subject. The phrase for commuting is a natural concise structure after convenient.