自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời của bạn tự nhiên và liên quan nhưng cần cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn (một câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ), tránh câu quá dài và lặp ý. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc và một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi bạn đỗ xe, bạn học kỹ năng gì khi đi xe) sẽ làm câu trả lời rõ rệt hơn. Lưu ý giữ tối đa 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got my first bike at the age of five and used it to cycle to school every day. I felt proud because it was my first possession, and learning to balance on it taught me confidence. For example, I would ride with my friends along the park after classes.

建议: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và ý không mạch lạc. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 2–3 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh từ ngữ lộn xộn. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ “onshore boat” không phù hợp) và chú ý thì động từ. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

示例: Not really. Public transport such as buses and taxis are more common in my country because they are more convenient for long distances. In addition, poor cycling infrastructure and heavy traffic discourage people from using bikes. For instance, many streets lack bike lanes, so most commuters prefer buses or motorbikes.

× Yes, I got my first bike when I was five. I used it to cycle to school every day and I remember being very proud because it was my own bike

✓ Yes, I got my first bike when I was five. I used it to cycle to school every day, and I remember being very proud because it was my own bike.

The original sentence mostly uses past tense correctly but is missing a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Add the comma for proper sentence structure and readability. Also ensure the final sentence ends with a period.

× Not really in my country, public transport is more common for example buses or taxis because they are more convenient and people can use them to travel long distance onshore boat cycling infrastructure and traffic make bus less popular

✓ Not really. In my country, public transport is more common; for example, buses or taxis are more convenient, and people can use them to travel long distances. A lack of cycling infrastructure and traffic make buses less popular.

The original contains run-on sentences, missing punctuation, incorrect pluralization, and unclear phrases. Break into clearer sentences, add commas and a semicolon, change 'long distance' to 'long distances' (plural), and correct 'onshore boat cycling infrastructure' to 'A lack of cycling infrastructure' to convey intended meaning. Also use 'buses' plural and 'make buses less popular' for subject-verb agreement and clarity.