自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar: use 'borrowed' instead of 'borrowing' and avoid extra words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: No, I didn’t own a bike as a child, but I often borrowed one from my neighbour. For example, every weekend I would ride to the park with friends, which helped me learn to balance and feel confident on two wheels.

建议: Make your answer clearer and more grammatically accurate. Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid vague words like 'rampant' and phrases like 'let's make this'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes have become very popular in my country, especially during the pandemic, because people avoided public transport. For example, many families bought bicycles for leisure rides and short commutes, which reduced traffic and helped people exercise.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I was able to ride one from borrowing from my neighbors.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I could ride one by borrowing it from my neighbors.

The sentence uses 'was able to' which is acceptable but wordy; more natural is 'could' for ability in the past. Also 'from borrowing from my neighbors' is ungrammatical: the preposition 'from' is redundant and there is no object for 'borrowing'. Use 'by borrowing it from my neighbors' to show the method and include the object 'it'. This fixes past tense expression and prepositional usage. (Relevant types: Past tense issue, Incorrect use of prepositions.)

× Yeah, it is popular in my country, especially when it was in pandemic era.

✓ Yes, they are popular in my country, especially during the pandemic.

The student refers to 'bikes' (plural) but used singular pronoun 'it' and singular verb 'is', causing subject-verb disagreement. Also 'when it was in pandemic era' is incorrect phrasing and tense; use 'during the pandemic' to indicate that period. This corrects subject-verb agreement and improves temporal expression.

× Bikes are very rampant and very popular So let's make this and they use it for use leisure and transportation.

✓ Bikes were very widespread and popular, and people used them for leisure and transportation.

This sentence has multiple issues: 'rampant' is inappropriate here; 'widespread' or 'common' fits better. The sentence structure is broken ('So let's make this and they use it for use leisure...') and contains redundant verb forms ('use it for use leisure'). The corrected sentence uses past tense 'were' to match the pandemic period mentioned earlier, replaces 'rampant' with 'widespread', and clarifies the subject 'people' and verbs 'used them for leisure and transportation', making the meaning clear and grammatical.