自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, exactly) and correct small grammar mistakes. Add one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, why you liked them or a memorable experience) to enrich the answer without exceeding five sentences.

示例: Yes, I had two bikes as a child. I got my first bike when I was six and the second when I was twelve. For example, I loved riding my second bike to the park because it was faster and more comfortable, so I spent many afternoons practicing tricks with my friends.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Avoid filler words (like) and use precise vocabulary (cyclists, bike lanes, infrastructure). You can also give a brief comparison or prediction to add depth.

示例: Not really — cycling is not very common in my country. One reason is that there are few dedicated bike lanes and the roads are often crowded with cars, so many people prefer driving. However, I think cycling could become more popular if the city invested in safer cycling infrastructure.

× I had uh two bikes uh, first bike I got when I was six years old and second one uh, I got in a 12 years old.

✓ I had two bikes. The first bike I got when I was six years old, and the second one I got when I was 12 years old.

Error: plural/singular and article timing expressions. 'first bike' and 'second one' need clearer sentence separation and 'in a 12 years old' is incorrect. Use 'when I was 12 years old' (no 'in a') and maintain singular/plural consistency. Also split into two clauses with a comma or period for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the first'/'the second' and 'when I was [age]'. Grammar problem type id: 1

× I had uh two bikes uh, first bike I got when I was six years old and second one uh, I got in a 12 years old.

✓ I had two bikes. The first bike I got when I was six years old, and the second one I got when I was 12 years old.

Error: incorrect preposition 'in' before 'a 12 years old'. Age expressions use 'when I was [age]' without 'in' or the article 'a'. Also remove unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: say 'when I was 12 years old' or simply 'when I was 12'. Grammar problem type id: 11

× I had uh two bikes uh, first bike I got when I was six years old and second one uh, I got in a 12 years old.

✓ I had two bikes. The first bike I got when I was six years old, and the second one I got when I was 12 years old.

Error: missing definite article 'the' before 'first bike' and 'second one' in this context. Also 'a 12 years old' incorrectly uses 'a' and plural 'years'. Use 'when I was 12 years old' and include 'the' for ordinal references. Suggestion: use 'the first' and 'the second' and correct age phrase. Grammar problem type id: 22

× Not really. We don't have like lots of bikers and there is not much bike lanes on the streets.

✓ Not really. We don't have many bikers, and there are not many bike lanes on the streets.

Error: 'lots of' is informal but acceptable; however 'not have like lots of bikers' is awkward. More importantly, 'there is not much bike lanes' mixes singular verb 'is' and uncountable 'much' with plural noun 'bike lanes'. Use 'many' with countable plural and plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: use 'many bikers' and 'there are not many bike lanes'. Grammar problem type id: 11

× Not really. We don't have like lots of bikers and there is not much bike lanes on the streets.

✓ Not really. We don't have many bikers, and there are not many bike lanes on the streets.

Error: subject-verb disagreement: 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'bike lanes'. Also 'much' is for uncountable nouns; use 'many' for countable nouns like 'bike lanes'. Suggestion: match plural nouns with 'are' and use 'many' for plural countable nouns. Grammar problem type id: 27