自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Use correct grammar and a clear, concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect word forms (e.g., "I didn't have a bike," not "I was not having"). Clarify the rule about age more naturally and explain your feeling with one simple reason using a linking word (for example, "because").

示例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because in my country children are not allowed to ride bikes until they are eighteen. Because of this rule and concerns about accidents, my parents preferred I didn’t ride one.

建议: Give a direct answer, then add one or two clear, specific supporting points using linking words. Improve grammar (e.g., "many people ride bikes" not "every people are having bikes") and avoid repetition. Provide a concise reason and, if possible, a brief example or statistic to make the point stronger.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many commuters use motorcycles or bicycles to travel to work since cars are too expensive for most families.

× No, I was not having a bike when I was a child because in our country it's eligible for a children to ride a bike when he is he or she is eighteen year old.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because in our country children are allowed to ride a bike when they are eighteen years old.

Use simple past for possession in the past: 'did not have' not 'was not having' (continuous not used for state). Replace 'it's eligible for a children' with 'children are allowed' to correct structure and voice. Use plural 'children' with plural pronoun 'they' and plural 'years old'. Suggestions: use simple past for past states (I had/did not have), use 'allow' passive or active ('are allowed'), and match plurality for nouns and pronouns.

× So that's why I was not having a bike when I was a child and it's really the dangerous horror has to because accidents do meet when we are young.

✓ So that's why I did not have a bike when I was a child, and it was really dangerous because accidents can happen when we are young.

Incorrect continuous for possession and several awkward phrases. Change 'was not having' to 'did not have'. 'It's really the dangerous horror has to' is ungrammatical; use 'it was really dangerous'. 'Accidents do meet' is wrong; use 'accidents can happen'. Also ensure tense consistency (past for childhood). Suggestions: keep simple past for past situations, use 'dangerous' as adjective, and use 'can happen' or 'may happen' for possibility.

× Yes, bikes are very common in our country because most of the people are riding bikes due to their low price and if people want to move from one place to another they simply ride the bike because cars are really expensive so people don't afford them, but bikes every people are having bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common in our country because most people ride them due to their low price. If people want to go from one place to another, they simply ride a bike because cars are very expensive and many people cannot afford them.

Use simple present for general facts: 'most people ride', not 'are riding' (continuous implies ongoing action). Replace 'move' with 'go' for natural phrasing. 'People don't afford them' is incorrect; use 'cannot afford them' or 'people cannot afford cars'. Remove redundant and ungrammatical phrase 'but bikes every people are having bikes'. Suggestions: use simple present for habits and general truths, use 'cannot afford' for inability, and avoid repetition.