自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with grammar, word choice and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the verb phrase and word choice (e.g., “we loved racing each other”), and avoid minor errors. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word to make the answer more coherent (e.g., why you liked it or a memory). Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a large yellow bike that I rode every weekend to the park with my friends because we loved racing each other. I especially remember practicing on a small hill near my house, which made me feel more confident and fast.

建议: Improve accuracy and cohesion by correcting phrasing and adding a clear reason with a linking word. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., “have to avoid traffic”) with natural expressions like “help people avoid traffic.” Add a specific example or comparison to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, in cities many people cycle to work because bikes are inexpensive and help them avoid traffic jams. In addition, the growing number of bike lanes makes cycling more convenient and safer.

× It was a large yellow bike and I rode it every weekend to the park with my friends because we load racing each other.

✓ It was a large yellow bike and I rode it every weekend to the park with my friends because we loved racing each other.

The original sentence uses 'load' which is incorrect in this context. The verb intended is 'love' in the past tense 'loved' to match 'rode' and 'used to' describing past habitual actions. This falls under 'Verb + -ing form' because the phrase 'racing each other' is correct as a gerund phrase following 'loved'. Suggestion: use 'loved racing each other' to show past enjoyment of the activity.

× If you walk along the streets you can see many people riding them especially in cities because bikes are cheap and have to avoid traffic.

✓ If you walk along the streets you can see many people riding them, especially in cities, because bikes are cheap and help to avoid traffic.

The phrase 'have to avoid traffic' is incorrect here; 'have to' implies obligation rather than the result or purpose. Use 'help to avoid traffic' to show that bikes assist in avoiding traffic. This is a modal/auxiliary usage issue since 'have to' and 'help to' change meaning and function of the verb. Suggestion: replace 'have to avoid' with 'help to avoid' or 'help avoid' to express causation rather than obligation.