自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear, direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid long pauses, filler words (uh, um), and incorrect verb forms. Use correct tense (past) and clearer vocabulary (bike vs cycle usage, “not common” instead of “not normal”).

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. There were two reasons: first, it was illegal for children to ride motorbikes in my hometown, and second, most families thought bikes were not appropriate for young children. As a result, we usually walked or used public transport to go to other places.

建议: Start with a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (people not peoples), use clearer explanations (why they become popular), and avoid fillers. Mention examples or comparisons to add specificity.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, law permits riding motorbikes only after turning 18, so many young adults buy bikes as their first vehicle. In addition, bikes are affordable and convenient for short trips in cities, which makes them a common choice.

× When I was child, I don't use bike because it is illegal.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't use a bike because it was illegal.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and 'bike'; wrong tense/aspect: question asks about past so present 'don't use' is incorrect; 'it is illegal' should be past 'it was illegal'. Suggestion: use 'a child' and 'a bike', and use past tense 'didn't use' and 'was' to match the time frame.

× Also because I'm not eating, uh, when I was child.

✓ Also because I was not eating, uh, when I was a child.

Error: tense mismatch and missing article. 'I'm not eating' (present continuous) does not match past context; use past 'I was not eating'. Add 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: maintain past tense when talking about past periods.

× And second thing was, uh, in my hometown, bike usually is not normal for a child.

✓ And the second thing was that in my hometown, bikes are not common for children.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' and awkward structure 'bike usually is not normal for a child.' Use plural 'bikes' and 'children' and 'are not common' for natural expression. Suggestion: use 'the second thing was that' and 'bikes are not common for children.'

× Uh, we, we, uh, used, we used umm, uh, cycle for traveling, uh, another place.

✓ Uh, we used cycles to travel to other places.

Errors: redundancy and wrong noun form 'cycle' should be plural 'cycles' if general, and 'for traveling another place' is unnatural; use 'to travel to other places.' Suggestion: simplify sentence and use infinitive 'to travel' with plural noun when general.

× Yeah, I think so. Bikes are legal after 18 years.

✓ Yeah, I think so. Bikes are legal after 18 years of age.

Error: phrase 'after 18 years' is ambiguous; better 'after 18 years of age' or 'from age 18.' Suggestion: use clear expression for legal age.

× Uh, peoples are normally offered bike, uh, after 18 years because uh, we can make our less driving lessons in our home country.

✓ People are normally offered bikes after they turn 18 because we can take fewer driving lessons in our country.

Errors: 'peoples' is incorrect plural form; use 'people'. 'Offered bike' needs plural 'bikes' or 'a bike'; rephrase 'after 18 years' to 'after they turn 18.' 'We can make our less driving lessons' is incorrect: use 'take fewer driving lessons.' Suggestion: use correct plural nouns, pronouns, and quantifier 'fewer' for countable 'less driving lessons.'

× Umm yes, bikes are popular.

✓ Umm, yes, bikes are popular.

Minor punctuation issue: add comma after 'Umm' for natural pause. Tense is correct (present simple) since it's a general statement. Suggestion: include comma for clarity; no tense change needed.