自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is short and unclear in parts ("under my rental school" is confusing). Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear supporting details using correct grammar. Use linking words if you add more information. Be specific about when you had the bike and how you used it.

示例: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was about eight years old, and I used it to ride to school nearly every day. After classes I often rode with friends in the neighborhood, which helped me learn to ride confidently and enjoy outdoor activities.

建议: Your answer has useful ideas but the grammar and sequencing make it hard to follow. Start with a clear opinion, then give organized supporting points with linking words (e.g., 'At first', 'later', 'recently'). Provide specific examples or reasons (e.g., traffic, bike lanes, health trends).

示例: At first, bikes were very common when I was a child because many students rode to school. Later, fewer people cycled as cars became more common, but recently cycling has become popular again because of new bike lanes and interest in healthier, eco-friendly transport.

× Yes, my dad bought it for me under my rental school for many years.

✓ Yes, my dad bought it for me near my rented school many years ago.

The original sentence misuses the preposition 'under' and the phrase 'rental school' is incorrect. Use 'near' or 'at' to indicate location, and 'rented school' is not natural; 'my school' or 'the school I attended' is better. Also add 'ago' to indicate a past time reference 'many years ago'. Improve by saying: 'Yes, my dad bought it for me near my school many years ago.'

× When I'm young years and many students ride to school and after many years I seldom saw people ride bike and I say several years bike has come back to be popular.

✓ When I was young, many students rode bikes to school. After many years, I seldom saw people riding bikes, but in recent years bicycles have become popular again.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'When I'm young years' should be past tense 'When I was young'; 'ride to school' should be past 'rode' to match time; 'I seldom saw people ride bike' requires progressive or gerund 'saw people riding bikes' and plural 'bikes'; 'I say several years bike has come back to be popular' is awkward and incorrect tense/word order — use 'in recent years bicycles have become popular again.' Revise sentences to keep consistent past narrative and correct verb forms and plural nouns.