自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: - Sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai (ví dụ: “write” → “ride”, “practice anything” → nói rõ hành động cụ thể). - Rút gọn các câu lặp và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng (loại bỏ “uh”). - Cấu trúc rõ ràng: câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (khi nào, ở đâu, cảm xúc). - Dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (e.g. “then”, “so”, “every day”). Cụ thể: hãy nói 2–4 câu, nêu rõ tuổi, ai tặng, ai dạy, và thói quen tập luyện kèm cảm xúc để tự nhiên và đầy đủ.

示例: I had a bike when I was five. My father bought it for me and my parents and grandparents taught me how to ride it. I used to practice every afternoon in the park until I felt confident, and I remember feeling very proud when I could ride without help.

建议: - Sửa ngữ pháp và word order (e.g. “bicycle is not very famous” → “bicycles are not very popular”; “are use of” → “use”). - Tránh câu bỏ dở; hoàn thành ý với lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. - Dùng linking words để làm rõ lý do (e.g. “because”, “also”, “however”). - Nên thêm 1 câu kết luận ngắn để trả lời thẳng vào câu hỏi. Cụ thể: nêu nhận định rõ ràng, đưa 1-2 lý do cụ thể (giao thông, văn hóa, cơ sở hạ tầng) và kết luận ngắn.

示例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for city traffic. Also, many cities lack safe bike lanes, so few people choose cycling for daily travel.

× After that, my parents and grandparents, uh, taught me how to write it.

✓ After that, my parents and grandparents taught me how to ride it.

The student used the verb 'write' which is incorrect for using a bicycle. The correct verb is 'ride' and here it appears in the simple past 'taught me how to ride'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use collocation 'ride a bicycle' instead of 'write'.

× And every day in the afternoon, I will practice anything.

✓ And every afternoon, I would practice riding.

The original sentence uses 'will' which indicates future; however the context is a past habitual action (when the student was five). Use 'would' or 'used to' for past habitual actions. Also 'practice anything' is vague; specify 'riding'. Suggestion: say 'I would practice riding' or 'I used to practice riding every afternoon.'

× To be honest, in my country bicycle is not very famous or popular because most people are use of public transport like motorbike or car and.

✓ To be honest, in my country bicycles are not very common or popular because most people use public transport like motorbikes or cars.

Several issues: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' to talk generally. 'Is' must be 'are' to agree with plural. 'Famous' is not natural for objects; use 'common' or 'popular'. 'Are use of' is incorrect; correct is 'use'. Also pluralize 'motorbike' and 'car' to 'motorbikes or cars'. Remove the trailing 'and.' Suggestion: say 'bicycles are not very common or popular because most people use public transport like motorbikes or cars.'