自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сфокусируйтесь на грамматике и ясности. Уберите повторы и неправильные временные формы: используйте простое прошедшее для описания прошлого (I had / I couldn't ride). Дайте короткое вступление (topic sentence), затем 1–2 поддерживающие фразы с конкретными деталями (почему она была большой, что вы сделали потом). Используйте связки (for example, because, so) последовательно и корректно. Не превышайте 3–4 предложений.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was too big for me, so I couldn't ride it well. For example, I often fell or had to walk it home because the seat was too high. Later my parents bought a smaller one, which made it much easier to learn.

建议: Сосредоточьтесь на логической связности и точности лексики. Начните с прямого ответа, затем дайте причину и пример. Избегайте тавтологии («summer» повторяется) и неточных выражений («cold weathered» — неверно). Используйте подходящие связки (because, although, however). Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями и добавьте конкретный пример о поведении людей летом.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because winters are long and cold, many people prefer cycling only in summer, when the weather is pleasant. For instance, in summer cities become full of cyclists commuting to work or riding in parks.

× Yes, I used to have a bike when I was when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'were' instead of the correct past singular 'was' for the pronoun I. Also there is a redundant 'when I was' repeated. Use 'was' for first person singular in past simple and remove the duplicated phrase. Suggestion: say 'when I was a child.'

× It was quite big for me because I cannot ride it.

✓ It was quite big for me because I could not ride it.

The speaker is describing a past situation ('It was quite big') so the reason clause must also be in the past tense. 'Cannot' is present tense and inconsistent. Use past ability 'could not' or 'couldn't'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in past narrative.

× So I was really, I have a lot of difficulties with this bike.

✓ So I really had a lot of difficulties with that bike.

Mixes past ('I was') with present perfect ('I have'). The entire statement refers to past experience, so use past simple 'had'. Use 'that bike' to refer back to previously mentioned bike. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout the anecdote.

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in a lot of countries, especially in mine, because as you know, Russia is a cold weathered country.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in many countries, especially in mine, because, as you know, Russia has cold weather.

'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is more natural here. 'Cold weathered country' is incorrect adjective usage; use 'has cold weather' or 'is a cold country.' Also punctuation: add commas around 'as you know.' Suggestion: say 'Russia is a cold country' or 'Russia has cold weather.'

× So when it's summer, everyone wants to use bike because it's a summer it's a

✓ So when it's summer, everyone wants to ride a bike because it's summer.

'Use bike' is incorrect collocation; 'ride a bike' is correct and requires the indefinite article 'a'. 'It's a summer' is incorrect—use 'it's summer'. Remove the duplicated fragment. Suggestion: 'when it's summer, everyone wants to ride a bike.'