自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (past tense, prepositions) and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., because, so, but). For example, explain why you didn’t have a bike (parents’ concern), then mention if you ever rode a bike later and with whom.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents were afraid I would get hurt. However, when I was a teenager I sometimes borrowed a bike from a neighbor and rode it with my friends to the park.

建议: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Improve phrasing and word choice (e.g., “in my view” or “I think”; “for commuting” instead of “from their work”). Use one linking word to connect reasons (e.g., because, so).

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and avoid traffic. For instance, in my city you can see many commuters cycling every morning to save time and money.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents are scared from my accident.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents were scared of me having an accident.

The preposition 'scared from' is incorrect; use 'scared of'. Also verb tense consistency: the main clause is past ('didn't have'), so use past 'were scared'. Rephrase 'my accident' to 'me having an accident' to clearly express the reason. Suggestion: use 'scared of' and keep past tense for related states.

× So I took a bike with my so I'm when I board I go outside with my friends

✓ So I took a bike from my parents, and when I got on it I went outside with my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing or wrong words ('with my so I'm', 'when I board'). 'Took a bike with my' is unclear; likely intended 'took a bike from my parents'. Maintain past tense to match context: 'got on it' or 'got on the bike' and 'went outside'. Use conjunction 'and' to connect ideas. Suggestion: keep clear subject-object phrases and consistent past tense verbs.

× Yeah, in my perspective, bikes are very popular in my country because people use them from their work when they go to their workplace so they all use the bikes

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country because people use them to go to work, so many people ride bikes.

Use 'in my opinion' rather than 'in my perspective' for natural phrasing. 'Use them from their work' is incorrect preposition and structure; use 'use them to go to work'. 'When they go to their workplace' is redundant; simplify to 'to go to work'. 'They all use the bikes' is awkward; 'many people ride bikes' is clearer. Maintain present simple for general facts. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('in my opinion', 'go to work', 'ride bikes') and avoid redundancy.