自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct repetition and timeline. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words to show sequence. Correct grammar (e.g. past simple, avoid repeating words) and keep under five sentences.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. However, I learned to ride when I was eighteen: a friend taught me during school, and afterward I rode her bike occasionally as a hobby.

建议: Clarify meaning (replace 'problem' with 'popular') and use linking words and specific examples. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid vague generalizations. Provide one reason and one example to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are convenient and affordable. For example, many middle-class and lower-income workers use motorbikes or bicycles to commute to work or to deliver goods for part-time jobs.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child, but when I grew up I practiced practiced riding a bike with my friend and she taught me when I was in class when I was eighteen years old and then I started riding my friend's bike for just a hobby.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child, but when I grew up I practiced riding a bike with my friend; she taught me when I was in class at eighteen years old, and then I started riding my friend's bike just as a hobby.

Repeated word 'practiced practiced' is a typing error and should be a single past tense verb 'practiced' or 'practised'. The sentence contains several past actions, so past tense is appropriate; keep verbs consistent. Also combine clauses with proper punctuation and use 'at eighteen years old' for age reference. Suggestion: remove the duplicate word, use semicolon or shorter sentences, and use 'just as a hobby' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, bikes are really problem in our country because it's really convenient and affordable.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in our country because they are convenient and affordable.

'Really problem' is incorrect; 'problem' is a noun, not an adjective. The intended adjective is 'popular.' Also 'it's' (it is) incorrectly refers to bikes plural; use 'they are.' Use 'convenient and affordable' as adjectives describing bikes. Suggestion: use matching plural pronouns and correct adjective 'popular'.

× Like people in our country are middle class or lower middle class people usually ride bikes to go to their jobs or do part time jobs in their bike.

✓ Many people in our country who are middle class or lower-middle class usually ride bikes to go to their jobs or to do part-time work on their bikes.

Sentence has pronoun and noun repetition and incorrect possessive 'in their bike.' Use 'many people' instead of 'like people' to start the sentence. Hyphenate 'lower-middle class' and 'part-time.' Use 'to do part-time work' rather than 'do part time jobs in their bike.' If referring to using bikes for work transport, say 'to do part-time work' or 'for part-time jobs' and avoid 'in their bike.' Also ensure plural agreement 'people... usually ride bikes' stays consistent.