自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn về thời gian và sử dụng thì đúng ngữ pháp; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và mở rộng thêm một chút để làm câu tự nhiên hơn. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi thì (was in grade 2 → when I was in Grade 2), chia động từ (brought → bought), và thay “until now” bằng “still use it” ở thì phù hợp hoặc nối hai phần bằng liên từ. Bạn cũng nên thêm một câu giải thích ngắn về kỷ niệm hoặc tần suất sử dụng để làm giàu nội dung.

示例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bike when I was in Grade 2, and I still use it sometimes today. I often ride it around my neighbourhood on weekends because it helps me relax and stay active.

建议: Câu trả lời hợp lý nhưng lặp từ và một số cụm từ không tự nhiên (ví dụ “step bike” không phổ biến). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý, thay những từ không chính xác bằng từ phù hợp (e.g. “scooters” or “bicycles”), và nêu thêm ví dụ cụ thể hoặc lý do ngắn gọn. Tránh câu quá dài và giữ dưới 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. When I cycle around my neighbourhood I often see many people riding bikes and electric scooters. This trend is positive because it reduces traffic congestion and helps improve air quality, especially in busy urban areas.

× Yes I did, my dad brought me a bike when I was in a grade 2 and I still use it until now.

✓ Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bike when I was in Grade 2, and I still use it now.

The sentence contains past tense errors and punctuation issues. 'Brought' is incorrect for receiving something; 'bought' (past tense of buy) is appropriate. Use 'Grade 2' (capitalization) and remove the article 'a' before grade. 'I still use it until now' is awkward; use 'I still use it now' or 'I still use it' for present meaning. Also split into two sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggested improvement: Use correct past tense verbs for past events, capitalize grade levels, and avoid literal translations like 'until now' when 'now' is sufficient.

× I believe yes because when I use my bike to cycle around my neighbourhood I can see there are also a lot of people who use step bike riding around.

✓ I believe so, because when I ride my bike around my neighbourhood I can see many people riding scooters and bicycles as well.

Multiple present tense and word-choice issues. 'I believe yes' is unnatural; use 'I believe so'. 'When I use my bike to cycle around' is redundant—use 'when I ride my bike around'. 'There are also a lot of people who use step bike riding around' is ungrammatical and unclear; possibly intended 'scooters' or 'step bikes'. Use 'many people riding' for present continuous activity. Suggested improvement: Use natural present tense expressions ('I ride', 'I can see') and clear vocabulary ('scooters', 'bicycles').

× And I think that's a good thing because more people riding bikes will improve the environment.

✓ And I think that's a good thing because more people riding bikes will improve the environment.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but consider improving verb form consistency: 'more people riding bikes will improve the environment' is fine as a reduced clause. Alternatively, use 'if more people ride bikes, it will improve the environment' for clearer subject-verb structure. Suggested improvement: Use 'if more people ride bikes, it will improve the environment' to make the conditional and subject-verb agreement explicit.