自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, use correct tenses and smoother linking. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words (umm, like) and correct verb forms (use past tense consistently). For example, say when you got the bike, describe it briefly, and explain what changed and why.

示例: Yes — I had a bike from the age of five. It was a three‑wheeled bike at first, and when I was about seven my father removed the training wheels so I could learn to ride on two wheels. After that I practiced every day until I felt confident.

建议: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct vocabulary (bike-sharing scheme, public bikes, pay station). Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Mention who uses them or where they are found to add specificity.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have public bike‑sharing schemes. For example, there are stations where you tap a card or pay at a kiosk to borrow a bike, so people use them for short trips to work or school.

× Yes I did when I was five years old.

✓ Yes, I did when I was five years old.

The sentence requires a comma after the introductory affirmation 'Yes' for correct punctuation and natural speech flow. This is not a tense error but a minor punctuation correction; keep past tense which is appropriate for a past event. Suggestion: Insert a comma after 'Yes' to separate the interjection from the clause.

× I have a bike, it's like 3 wheel bike.

✓ I had a bike; it was like a three-wheel bike.

The student switches tenses and omits the article 'a' before 'three-wheel bike'. The context (childhood) requires past tense 'had' and 'was'. Use the article 'a' and hyphenate 'three-wheel' as a compound adjective. Also spell out numbers under ten in formal speech. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent and include the indefinite article 'a' and a hyphen in compound adjectives.

× But when I was growing up like 7 years old maybe umm my dad took off the like supports.

✓ But when I was growing up, at about seven years old, my dad removed the training wheels.

Several issues: use of 'like' as a filler, numeric format, and informal 'took off the like supports'. The clause refers to the past, so 'was growing up' is fine, but clearer wording is 'at about seven years old'. 'Removed' is a clearer past verb than 'took off', and 'training wheels' is the correct noun. Punctuation (commas) improves clarity. Suggestion: Remove filler words, use 'at about seven years old', use the past verb 'removed', and use the specific term 'training wheels'.

× Definitely say yes, because we have a free vehicle free bikes, uh, when we tap the pay the machine and the bike.

✓ Definitely yes, because we have free bikes that you can unlock by tapping a payment card on the machine attached to the bike.

Tense and phrasing are mixed and unclear. Use present simple 'we have' for a general statement. The phrase 'tap the pay the machine and the bike' is ungrammatical; clarify the mechanism as 'tapping a payment card on the machine attached to the bike'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant words. Use plural agreement 'bikes'. Suggestion: Use clear present simple statements, remove fillers, and reorder the clause to show how the bikes are unlocked.

× So we have lots of free bike depends on the.

✓ So we have lots of free bikes available.

The original has wrong noun number ('bike' should be plural 'bikes') and an incomplete clause 'depends on the.' Use 'lots of' with plural noun and remove the unfinished fragment. 'Available' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Use plural nouns after quantifiers like 'lots of' and avoid leaving sentences incomplete.