自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về thì và sửa ngữ pháp, rút gọn câu không cần thiết, làm nội dung mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: 'secondary school', 'so that' dùng đúng). Nên có một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó một hoặc hai câu chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tần suất, khoảng cách, kỷ niệm ngắn). Hạn chế lỗi thì (ride → rode), danh từ sai (area → school), và ý không rõ (save time -> help my mother).

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it to secondary school almost every day because my mother needed to get to work early, so I helped by taking myself to school. I remember enjoying the fresh air on the way and sometimes racing with my friends.

建议: Cần diễn đạt ý rõ ràng và logic hơn, sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ chính xác (ví dụ: 'less popular than other forms of transport', 'public transportation'). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, rồi giải thích lý do với ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: tốc độ đô thị hóa, thu nhập, phương tiện công cộng). Tránh từ lặp và cấu trúc rườm rà như 'is an is lower'.

示例: Not really. Bicycles are less popular now than they used to be because many people prefer faster or more comfortable options like buses, motorbikes or cars. For example, in cities improved public transport and higher incomes mean fewer people cycle to work, so cycling is more common among students or recreational riders.

× I remember that I ride my bike to school every day during my secondary area so that I can have my mother save time.

✓ I remember that I rode my bike to school every day during my secondary years so that my mother could save time.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action, so the verb should be in the past tense (rode) rather than present (ride). 'Secondary area' is incorrect word choice; use 'secondary years' or 'secondary school years'. Also, the clause expressing ability in the past should use 'could' rather than 'can'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past memories and choose correct nouns for periods of schooling.

× Not really, you know, riding to somewhere by bicycle is an is lower than other public transmortation so that it isn't as important as it was in the past.

✓ Not really, you know, riding a bicycle to places is less common than other public transportation, so it isn't as important as it was in the past.

Use 'to places' or simply 'places' instead of 'to somewhere'. The phrase 'is an is lower than' is ungrammatical; use 'is less common than' to compare frequency. 'Transmortation' is a misspelling of 'transportation'. Also replace the comma splice with a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'less common' for comparisons of frequency and correct spelling of 'transportation'.