自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сократите повторения и исправьте ошибки. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой и связующими словами. Например, уберите двойное «used» и «on my on our», используйте связки («but», «so», «only during») и укажите конкретный возраст или место.

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child and I rode it a lot. However, I kept it at our countryside house, so I only used it during summer breaks. I usually rode with my friends around the fields when I was about ten.

建议: Сделайте ответ более точным и связным. Начните с общей позиции, затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины с примерами и используйте связки («because», «for example», «so»). Избегайте расплывчатых фраз («there are many») — уточните, что именно много (парков, велодорожек и т. п.).

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have dedicated cycle lanes and large parks. For example, in my hometown — the capital — there are numerous parks and long bike paths, so many people cycle for leisure and commuting.

× However I kept it only on my on our countryside house and it means that only during summer break I could.

✓ However, I kept it at our countryside house, which means I could use it only during summer break.

The original sentence has incorrect verb usage and word order for past tense narration. Use 'kept' is okay but 'on my on our countryside house' is ungrammatical; 'at our countryside house' is correct preposition (see preposition rules). Also 'it means that only during summer break I could' mixes present tense 'means' with past context and leaves the modal 'could' without an object. Change to 'which means I could use it only during summer break' to keep past meaning consistent and clear. Suggestions: use consistent past tense narrative, correct preposition 'at', and include the verb 'use' after 'could'.

× Yes, I think that the bikes are extremely popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are extremely popular in my country.

Using the definite article 'the' before general plural 'bikes' is unnecessary when speaking generally. In English, we say 'bikes are popular' rather than 'the bikes are popular' for general statements. Suggestion: omit 'the' for generalizations about a whole class.

× It occurs primarily because we have a lot of green spaces in, for example, my hometown.

✓ This occurs primarily because we have a lot of green spaces in my hometown, for example.

'It occurs primarily because...' is acceptable, but placing 'for example' and a comma before 'my hometown' makes the sentence awkward. Reorder to 'This occurs primarily because we have a lot of green spaces in my hometown, for example.' Also using 'This' is clearer than 'It' when referring to the previous idea. Suggestion: move 'for example' to the end or set it off with commas.

× It's the capital of our country and there are many.

✓ It is the capital of our country, and there are many green spaces.

The fragment 'and there are many' is incomplete because 'many' needs a noun to modify (many what?). Add the noun 'green spaces' to complete the idea. Also expand the contraction to 'It is' or keep 'It's' as needed; include a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and I used used to ride it quite a lot.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and I used to ride it quite a lot.

The phrase 'used used to' contains a duplicated 'used'. Also 'used to' is the correct semi-modal expression to describe past habitual actions; it should be followed by the base verb 'ride' (not -ing). Suggestion: remove the extra 'used' and keep 'used to ride'.