自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve accuracy, coherence and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the verb error (“write” → “ride”), avoid repetition (“color”/“coloured”), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word to make the answer more natural and informative. Keep the answer to no more than 4–5 sentences.

示例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a black bicycle with gold stripes, and I rode it every evening after my tuition classes. Because the route near my home was quiet, I could practise cycling for about an hour each day, which helped me gain confidence quickly.

建议: Make the answer more concise and grammatical. Start with a direct opinion, avoid vague phrases like “smaller age group to bigger age groups,” use linking words (for example, “for example” or “because”) and give a specific reason or example. Finish the thought fully and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, people of all ages, from children to older adults, use them for short trips and exercise. Because bikes are affordable and convenient in congested areas, many families own at least one bicycle.

× I used to write it every evening after my tuition classes.

✓ I used to ride it every evening after my tuition classes.

The verb 'write' is incorrect in this context; the speaker meant the habitual action of riding the bike. 'Used to' requires a base verb that describes the repeated past action; replace 'write' with 'ride' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use verbs that match the activity described (ride for bicycles).

× Every person from a smaller age group to bigger age groups have bikes these days.

✓ Every person from a smaller age group to bigger age groups has a bike these days.

Subject-verb agreement and number consistency: 'Every person' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has' not 'have'. Also 'bikes' should reflect that each person has a single bike in this context, so 'a bike' is more appropriate. Suggestion: Match verb number to the singular subject 'every' and keep noun number consistent (a bike).

× Smaller younger people like to ride bikes in the evening when they want to play with their friends and

✓ Younger people like to ride bikes in the evening when they want to play with their friends.

'Smaller younger people' is redundant and awkward; use 'younger people'. The sentence was also left incomplete with a trailing 'and'; removing 'and' and finishing the clause yields a complete sentence. Suggestion: Avoid redundant adjectives and ensure sentences are complete.