自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and complete your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “I did have” and “when I was a child” together). Also finish your thought — the answer cuts off. Use varied vocabulary (supporting wheels -> training wheels) and correct small grammar issues ("gave me during my seventh birthday" → "gave it to me for my seventh birthday").

示例: Yes. I had my first bike when I was seven years old. My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and it had training wheels because I couldn't balance yet. A couple of years later, they removed the training wheels and I learned to ride on my own, which made me feel very independent.

建议: Good clear answer: direct topic sentence, specific supporting details and reasons, and appropriate linking. To improve further, add one brief personal observation or a concrete example to make it more engaging and slightly vary vocabulary (e.g., "commuters" -> "city commuters" or "delivery riders"), and use one additional linking phrase for flow. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many cities now have dedicated bike lanes, so city commuters and delivery riders often cycle to work because it is cheap and practical. As a result, more people enjoy the health benefits and reduced traffic congestion, which also helps the environment.

× My parents gave me during my seventh birthday.

✓ My parents gave it to me on my seventh birthday.

The original sentence omits the object and uses an incorrect preposition. 'Give' needs a direct object (the bike) or an indirect object phrase; here 'it' refers to the bike. Use the preposition 'on' with specific days/events ('on my seventh birthday'). Correct structure: 'My parents gave it to me on my seventh birthday.' Suggestion: Always include the object after 'gave' (or use 'gave X to Y') and use 'on' for specific days or occasions.

× That bike was like with two supporting wheels because I was still young at the time and I couldn't balance yet.

✓ That bike had two training wheels because I was still young and couldn't balance yet.

The phrase 'was like with' is ungrammatical and colloquial. Use a clear verb to describe possession/features: 'had.' 'Two supporting wheels' is better phrased as 'two training wheels' (common term). Also 'at the time' is unnecessary when 'still young' and 'couldn't balance yet' already convey time. Suggestion: Use concise, standard expressions and correct verbs for possession.

× After two years when my parents

✓ After two years, my parents...

This fragment is incomplete and cuts off the sentence, creating a sentence structure error (sentence without a verb/fragment). You must complete the thought. If the intended meaning is 'After two years, my parents removed the training wheels' or 'After two years, my parents bought me a new bike,' include the main clause. Suggestion: Always finish clauses and ensure each sentence has a subject and main verb.

× Many cities now have dedicated bike lanes which make cycling safer and a large number of commuters use bikes to get to and from work because it is cheap and practical.

✓ Many cities now have dedicated bike lanes, which make cycling safer, and a large number of commuters use bikes to get to and from work because it is cheap and practical.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation for clarity, not a verb -ing error. However, the list requires only corrections matching the provided types; here commas clarify the relative clause. 'Cycling' as a gerund is correct. Suggestion: Add commas around the nonrestrictive clause 'which make cycling safer' to improve readability.