自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is direct and natural, which is good for Part 1. To improve, expand slightly with one brief reason or a related detail (1–2 sentences) using a linking word, while keeping the total under five sentences. This shows fluency and gives the examiner more to assess (grammar, vocabulary, coherence). Avoid single-word or one-line answers whenever possible.

示例: No, I didn't because my family lived in a small apartment and there wasn't space to store a bike. However, I sometimes borrowed one from neighbours to ride in the park on weekends.

建议: Your response addresses the question and gives a reason, but it has repetition, some grammatical errors, and slightly awkward phrasing. To improve: (1) Remove repeated words and use clearer sentence structure; (2) Use a linking word to organise ideas (e.g., "because", "however"); (3) Provide one specific example or contrast to support your point; (4) Use correct relative clauses and verb forms. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'infrastructure', 'cycling lanes', 'commuters').

示例: Bikes are not very popular in my country because the road infrastructure lacks dedicated cycle lanes, so riding alongside cars feels unsafe. As a result, most adults prefer motorcycles or cars, while children use small bikes mainly for play in parks or quiet streets.

× Bikes are not really popular in my country because the way the roads are built it does not allow for a bike passage which makes it difficult to ride a bike with cars passing passing passing through.

✓ Bikes are not really popular in my country because the way the roads are built does not allow for bike lanes, which makes it difficult to ride a bike when cars are passing through.

This sentence has sentence structure and clarity issues: there is a redundant subject and awkward clause sequencing ('the way the roads are built it does not allow' is ungrammatical). Also 'bike passage' is not the usual collocation; 'bike lanes' is natural. Repeating 'passing' is an error. Suggested improvement: remove the extra subject 'it', use 'does not allow for' streamlined as 'does not allow for bike lanes' or 'does not provide bike lanes', and connect the result clause with 'which' or 'so' to show consequence. Ensure verbs agree with the singular subject 'the way the roads are built' treated as a situation (use 'does not') and use 'when' for the temporal clause 'when cars are passing through.'

× So bikes are not really popular in my country except for kids that they used to play.

✓ So bikes are not really popular in my country, except that children used to play with them.

The original uses an incorrect and redundant pronoun structure: 'kids that they used to play' combines a relative clause and a subject pronoun unnecessarily. Also 'kids' is informal; 'children' is more appropriate in a test answer. The verb 'used to play' indicates past habitual action; pair it with the correct object 'with them' to clarify that children played with bikes. Alternatively: 'except among children, who used to play with them.'