自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, directly answer the question, correct grammatical errors, use linking words and provide one or two specific supporting details. Keep it under five sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence (“Yes, I did.”), then add specific details (when you got the bike, where you rode it, a brief reason you liked it) and finish coherently. Avoid incomplete fragments and unnecessary words.

示例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was eight and I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it let me explore nearby parks and feel the wind in my face. Also, I often rode with my friends after school, which made it more fun.

建议: Provide a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and a clear comparison. Fix grammar (e.g., “worked their own bike” → “used their bikes”) and use linking words like “however” or “although” to show contrast. Keep to under five sentences and finish the thought about comparison to other countries.

示例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. During the COVID-19 lockdown many people started cycling for exercise and short trips, so bike sales and use increased. However, compared with some developed countries, we still lack cycling infrastructure like bike lanes and safe parking, which limits wider adoption.

× I used to have one and back then I really enjoy reading a bike because by riding a bike you can explore a new road and also I feel like it's kind of windy when you take a bike ride and if.

✓ I used to have one, and back then I really enjoyed riding a bike because by riding a bike you could explore new roads, and I also felt the wind when I went for a bike ride.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Used to' establishes a past habitual action, so verbs describing that time should be in the past (enjoy → enjoyed; feel → felt). 'Reading a bike' is incorrect; the correct gerund is 'riding a bike'. 'By riding a bike you can explore a new road' shifts to general present; to match past context use 'could explore new roads' or keep present consistently. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past for past habits), use the correct gerund 'riding', pluralize 'road' to 'roads' for naturalness, and simplify clauses to avoid sentence fragment 'and if'.

× Yeah, I think it's quite popular and there's a time when, you know, COVID-19 lockdown, everyone was enjoying a healthy lifestyle and most of them worked their own bike at their home.

✓ Yeah, I think it's quite popular. During the COVID-19 lockdown, everyone tried to enjoy a healthier lifestyle, and most people used their own bikes at home.

The original uses awkward pronouns and verb choices: 'there's a time when' is unnatural for a past event; 'everyone was enjoying a healthy lifestyle' is acceptable but 'tried to enjoy a healthier lifestyle' is clearer. 'Most of them worked their own bike at their home' is incorrect: 'worked their own bike' is wrong verb choice and 'at their home' is unnecessary. Use 'most people used their own bikes' or 'rode their bikes at home'. Suggestions: replace vague pronouns with 'people', choose correct verbs ('use' or 'ride' not 'work'), and structure the time phrase as 'during the COVID-19 lockdown'.

× But compared with other developed country, maybe it's.

✓ But compared with other developed countries, maybe it's less common.

The phrase 'other developed country' should be plural 'other developed countries' when making a general comparison. The original sentence also ends incomplete ('maybe it's.'). A comparison needs a clear comparator, e.g., 'less common' or 'more popular'. Suggestions: pluralize 'country' to 'countries' and complete the comparison by specifying what 'it' refers to (popularity) and whether it is more or less common.