自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar and use clear linking to sequence events. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add two specific details (colour, frequency, what happened) using proper tense and punctuation. Avoid redundant words and unclear phrases like "unlimited neighbors."

示例: Yes. I had a blue bike that I rode almost every day when I was a child. I enjoyed cycling to the park and around my neighborhood with my friends. When I was thirteen the bike was stolen, which was very upsetting because I used it so often.

建议: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "electric cars," "autonomous vehicles") and avoid filler words like "like" and vague time claims. Keep sentences grammatically correct and within the 5-sentence limit.

示例: Not really. Bikes have become less common in my country because electric cars and autonomous vehicles are more affordable and convenient. For example, many people prefer cars for longer commutes and poor cycling infrastructure discourages cycling in cities.

× Yes, indeed I did have a blue bike that I would ride every day since I was a child until I turned thirteen it got stolen and taken away by one of my unlimited neighbors.

✓ Yes, I had a blue bike that I rode every day until I turned thirteen; it was stolen by one of my neighbors.

The sentence mixes past simple with 'would' and 'since' incorrectly. Use past simple for habitual past actions ('I had', 'I rode'). 'Would' can indicate habitual past but is unnecessary here. 'Since' with a past time is incorrect; use until. Also run-on sentence; split into two clauses and use passive 'was stolen' for the event. Remove 'unlimited' which is meaningless in this context or replace with a specific descriptor.

× To be honest and genuine, my bikes like are not popular at all.

✓ To be honest, bikes are not popular at all in my country.

The original has awkward filler words ('like') and a misplaced possessive 'my' that conflicts with the general statement. Use present simple for general truths ('bikes are not popular'). Remove unnecessary words and place the location at the end for clarity.

× I haven't seen a bike in my country since like twenty twenty and it's currently twenty twenty six because it's technology and AI is like evolving and cars, AI cars and electrical cars have been growing and many people have been using them more than bikes.

✓ I haven't seen many bikes in my country since 2020, and now in 2026 technology and AI are advancing, so electric and AI-driven cars have become more common than bikes.

Multiple issues: 'since' should be followed by a point in time (2020) without 'like'; use 'many bikes' not 'a bike' to match context. Use present perfect 'haven't seen' with correct time reference. 'It's technology' is incorrect; say 'technology and AI are advancing' (plural). Use 'electric and AI-driven cars' for clarity; 'have become more common than bikes' is a clearer comparative structure. Also replace 'twenty twenty' with '2020' and 'twenty twenty six' with '2026' for concise written form.