自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, tense and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, how you used it). Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if you add details.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels at first, but I learned to ride without them by the end of the summer.

建议: Be more confident and organize your answer: give a direct opinion, then support it with two clear, specific reasons linked by connectors (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid vague phrases and incorrect collocations; use 'environmentally friendly' and plural/singular agreement correctly.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, I often see cyclists on the main streets during rush hour, and there are convenient bike lanes in several cities. Also, bikes are more environmentally friendly than buses for short journeys and are cheaper to maintain.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a little.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was little.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was little'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past context. Also 'a little' is incorrect for age reference; use 'little' or 'a child'. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was little' or 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Uh, maybe yes. I always see the people who ride the bike on the street and people sing right back.

✓ Uh, maybe yes. I always see people riding bikes on the street, and people wave back.

'I always see the people who ride the bike' is awkward and mixes simple present with a relative clause; use 'see people riding bikes' (verb + -ing) to describe habitual actions. 'Ride the bike' should be plural/general 'ride bikes'. 'People sing right back' is likely intended as 'people wave back' — 'sing' is incorrect verb choice. Use 'wave back' to describe a reciprocal greeting. Also combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× Bike is more environmental friendly than bus.

✓ Bikes are more environmentally friendly than buses.

'Bike' and 'bus' need plural forms when speaking generally: 'Bikes' and 'buses'. 'Environmental friendly' is incorrect word order and form; use adverbial form 'environmentally friendly'. Use comparative 'more' with the adjective 'environmentally friendly' or simply 'more environmentally friendly.'