自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện phát âm từ vựng (ví dụ "rabbit" không đúng — có lẽ bạn muốn nói "bike" hoặc "bicycle") và ngữ pháp (đổi thì, mạo từ và giới từ). Tránh lặp từ thừa (“when I had when I was a child”). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ khi cần để mạch lạc. Ví dụ cụ thể: nêu tuổi, ai tặng, mục đích sử dụng, tần suất và cảm xúc ngắn gọn.

示例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for my seventh birthday, and I often rode it to my friend's house or in the park almost every weekend.

建议: Chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít và trật tự từ (ví dụ "in the city", "short trips", "they help avoid traffic"). Dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng hơn và đưa thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thời tiết, cơ sở hạ tầng hoặc vùng cụ thể). Tránh lỗi chia động từ với danh từ số nhiều/số ít và cải thiện vốn từ bằng vài từ vựng liên quan (commute, convenient, affordable).

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities. Many people use them for short trips because they are inexpensive, easy to park and help avoid traffic; for example, I often see students and office workers cycling to school or work.

× Yes, I had a small rabbi when I had when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child.

The student used 'had' redundantly and wrote 'rabbi' (spelling error). Main issue: past tense is correct but sentence is awkward with repetition 'when I had when'. Remove redundancy and correct the noun. Suggestion: use 'I had' once and use the correct noun 'bicycle' or 'bike'.

× My parents bought it for my 7th birthday and I used it to go to my friend house and ride in the park almost every weekend.

✓ My parents bought it for my 7th birthday and I used it to go to my friend's house and ride in the park almost every weekend.

Missing possessive apostrophe in 'friend's house' and 'friend house' is incorrect noun phrase. Also tense 'used' is fine (past). Suggestion: use possessive form for nouns showing ownership: 'my friend's house'. Also consider 'almost every weekend' is fine.

× Well, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in city.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities.

Use of preposition/article wrong: 'in city' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'in cities' or 'in the city' depending on meaning. Suggestion: choose 'in cities' to refer generally or 'in the city' for a specific urban area.

× Many people use them for short trip because they are cheap and easy to park and they have avoid traffic.

✓ Many people use them for short trips because they are cheap and easy to park and they help avoid traffic.

Errors: 'short trip' should be plural 'short trips' to match 'many people'; 'have avoid' is incorrect collocation. Use 'help avoid' or 'avoid' with subject 'they'. Suggestion: use 'help avoid traffic' or 'allow them to avoid traffic'.

× For example, I often see student and office worker riding bikes to work or school.

✓ For example, I often see students and office workers riding bikes to work or school.

Count nouns 'student' and 'office worker' need plural forms to match 'I often see' (multiple people). Suggestion: pluralize to 'students' and 'office workers'.